Princess Viola Posted August 23, 2008 Share Posted August 23, 2008 [hide=Chapter One]Twenty-one. The year when legally, you are an adult. It's also the year you begin your training for the world of RuneScape. But, let me tell you about me. My name is Jason Dervil, and both me and my parents were born in the town of Lumbridge. We had lived in Lumbridge until I was three, when we moved to Varrock. Soon, my little sister, Jessica, was born. But, let's fast-forward to the beginning of the story. Well, let me just say that I had been practicing for the training since I was ten, so I was pretty ready. Everything was easy for me. The cooking, woodcutting, combat, and firemaking? It couldn't have been easier. But then, came the time for magick. Ugh! How I despise the magicks! It seems that I am cursed by never being able to properly cast a spell. Then, I faced the master of magicks. His name was Ret, he appeared to be around eighty years old. "[garden tool] [garden tool]! So, you're Mr. Dervil, am I right? I've heard wonderful things about you!", he said has he bellowed out laughing. "You're here for the magicks test, am I correct?" "Umm, yes", I replied sheepishly "Also, I didn't catch your name, would you mind telling me it again?" "Of course! My name is Ret!", the old man relpied. "Now, for your test, I need you to turn this stone, into a diamond, via magick." As he said this, he put a small stone on the table and gave me the required runestones to cast the spell. "All right, here I go", I said as I prepped myself for the spell. I layed the runestones on the ground, drew their energy from them, and launched the energy at the stone. Then, a puff of black smoke. Failure, I had turned the stone into something, but not a diamond, I had turned it into a lump of coal. "Hehe", Ret laughed, "it's all right, very few got it on the first attempt. Now, what you did wrong was you didn't draw enough energy from the Fire runestones. You used the energy from three of them, you should try five. Now, try again." He smiled. I once again layed them on the ground, drew the energies from them, and blasted the new stone with the energy. A brilliant white flash, and there, where the stone was just seconds before, a lovely diamond. "I did it!" I exclaimed while jumping for joy. "Yes, and you've passed the training. You can now be anything you want in the world!", Ret said happily. "Now go and have an adventure!" And then, I left the training to begin my own adventure in the world.[/hide] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bluejayfan94 Posted August 23, 2008 Share Posted August 23, 2008 That moved way too fast, especially since I thought that the training ended at 21 (or whatever) and from what I read was that the main character passed training at age 10. You have made me really confused. HomerSPC's Lets Plays : : Minecraft, Portal, Halo and more! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Princess Viola Posted August 23, 2008 Author Share Posted August 23, 2008 That moved way too fast, especially since I thought that the training ended at 21 (or whatever) and from what I read was that the main character passed training at age 10. You have made me really confused. Sorry I confused you. Let me clarify, the main character began practicing for the training since he was 10 and the training actually started at age 21. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bluejayfan94 Posted August 23, 2008 Share Posted August 23, 2008 But from what you wrote, was he hated magick. And then it went straight to the training in the same paragraph. Seperate those, thats what got me confused. HomerSPC's Lets Plays : : Minecraft, Portal, Halo and more! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Harakiri Posted August 24, 2008 Share Posted August 24, 2008 But from what you wrote, was he hated magick. And then it went straight to the training in the same paragraph. Seperate those, thats what got me confused. I agree with Blue Jay...I am confused as hell. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
llamster Posted August 25, 2008 Share Posted August 25, 2008 So... completing magic training takes... a couple of minutes? Why don't you at least TRY to make your story realistic? Ah, this reminds me about the noob on the Runescape forums who was upset with the quest "Cold War" because apparently his grandparents died in the war. :wall: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bluejayfan94 Posted August 25, 2008 Share Posted August 25, 2008 So... completing magic training takes... a couple of minutes? Why don't you at least TRY to make your story realistic? Ha, never hough about it taking just about 10 minutes to do. Good thought though, and I agree with you there. HomerSPC's Lets Plays : : Minecraft, Portal, Halo and more! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Harakiri Posted August 25, 2008 Share Posted August 25, 2008 And why is everyone quoting their stories now? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bluejayfan94 Posted August 25, 2008 Share Posted August 25, 2008 And why is everyone quoting their stories now? What do you mean? HomerSPC's Lets Plays : : Minecraft, Portal, Halo and more! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Harakiri Posted August 25, 2008 Share Posted August 25, 2008 I mean quoting them like this... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bluejayfan94 Posted August 25, 2008 Share Posted August 25, 2008 I mean quoting them like this... I don't undserstand what you meant by "And why is everyone quoting their stories now?" People have always quoted. HomerSPC's Lets Plays : : Minecraft, Portal, Halo and more! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
llamster Posted August 26, 2008 Share Posted August 26, 2008 I mean quoting them like this... I don't undserstand what you meant by "And why is everyone quoting their stories now?" People have always quoted. He means how people put their stories in quotes (though technically the OP put them in hide tags, not a quote). Ah, this reminds me about the noob on the Runescape forums who was upset with the quest "Cold War" because apparently his grandparents died in the war. :wall: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bluejayfan94 Posted August 26, 2008 Share Posted August 26, 2008 I mean quoting them like this... I don't undserstand what you meant by "And why is everyone quoting their stories now?" People have always quoted. He means how people put their stories in quotes (though technically the OP put them in hide tags, not a quote). People think their stories are big, but until they read something from Archimage/Xewleer/Sephy they won't think that. HomerSPC's Lets Plays : : Minecraft, Portal, Halo and more! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dragoonson Posted August 26, 2008 Share Posted August 26, 2008 I mean quoting them like this... I don't undserstand what you meant by "And why is everyone quoting their stories now?" People have always quoted. He means how people put their stories in quotes (though technically the OP put them in hide tags, not a quote). People think their stories are big, but until they read something from Archimage/Xewleer/Sephy they won't think that. I'm pretty sure if I didn't seperate Goffen Holy Wars I'd out length those ;) .I'm working on something,so I might make one longer than those in one go. Oh and Ratchet's pretty long too.His rant needed a tl;dr :lol: so i herd u liek devarts?If you look at me and feel offended by my 666-ism,think.I could be just as offended by your "cross".[hide=This's why I'm hot]The Eleventh Commandment:Thou Shalst only say "Amen,brother".Amen, brother :lol:Amen, brudda (referring to the 10th commandment)amen Bruder! (german ftw)I'm invulnerable to everything, except Lenin and Dragoonson.That's impossible. I love people.[/hide] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bluejayfan94 Posted August 26, 2008 Share Posted August 26, 2008 I'm pretty sure if I didn't seperate Goffen Holy Wars I'd out length those ;) .I'm working on something,so I might make one longer than those in one go. Oh and Ratchet's pretty long too.His rant needed a tl;dr :lol: O RLY? Yea, I give ratchet a spot in those long people I mentioned, but you... I am not too sure lol HomerSPC's Lets Plays : : Minecraft, Portal, Halo and more! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
malo2 Posted September 3, 2008 Share Posted September 3, 2008 I haven't read it yet, but there is one thing I noticed in the first sentence that I know will make the story quite unrealistic for me. Runescape is based in the Medieval times, when there were really no "Legal ages", and people often wed as early as the age of 13. 21 back then was like 40 is today. Lastfm Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bluejayfan94 Posted September 3, 2008 Share Posted September 3, 2008 I haven't read it yet, but there is one thing I noticed in the first sentence that I know will make the story quite unrealistic for me. Runescape is based in the Medieval times, when there were really no "Legal ages", and people often wed as early as the age of 13. 21 back then was like 40 is today. And, people didn't really keep track of who was what age, because they didn't really have a calendar everyone followed. I year could have been one day. HomerSPC's Lets Plays : : Minecraft, Portal, Halo and more! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Princess Viola Posted September 3, 2008 Author Share Posted September 3, 2008 I haven't read it yet, but there is one thing I noticed in the first sentence that I know will make the story quite unrealistic for me. Runescape is based in the Medieval times, when there were really no "Legal ages", and people often wed as early as the age of 13. 21 back then was like 40 is today. And, people didn't really keep track of who was what age, because they didn't really have a calendar everyone followed. I year could have been one day. More importantly, RuneScape is NOT based in medieval times, if it was, all the towns wouldn't exist, nor would any of the monsters except for a specific few. RuneScape is fantasy. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bluejayfan94 Posted September 3, 2008 Share Posted September 3, 2008 I haven't read it yet, but there is one thing I noticed in the first sentence that I know will make the story quite unrealistic for me. Runescape is based in the Medieval times, when there were really no "Legal ages", and people often wed as early as the age of 13. 21 back then was like 40 is today. And, people didn't really keep track of who was what age, because they didn't really have a calendar everyone followed. I year could have been one day. More importantly, RuneScape is NOT based in medieval times, if it was, all the towns wouldn't exist, nor would any of the monsters except for a specific few. RuneScape is fantasy. But castles, kings/queens, knights, wtc were based off the Medieval times, and you could ask anyone. Runescape is based in a Medieval fantasy. HomerSPC's Lets Plays : : Minecraft, Portal, Halo and more! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
malo2 Posted September 3, 2008 Share Posted September 3, 2008 I haven't read it yet, but there is one thing I noticed in the first sentence that I know will make the story quite unrealistic for me. Runescape is based in the Medieval times, when there were really no "Legal ages", and people often wed as early as the age of 13. 21 back then was like 40 is today. And, people didn't really keep track of who was what age, because they didn't really have a calendar everyone followed. I year could have been one day. Um, yes they did, and everyone knew well what age they were. Years have been kept track of since the ancient times. I haven't read it yet, but there is one thing I noticed in the first sentence that I know will make the story quite unrealistic for me. Runescape is based in the Medieval times, when there were really no "Legal ages", and people often wed as early as the age of 13. 21 back then was like 40 is today. And, people didn't really keep track of who was what age, because they didn't really have a calendar everyone followed. I year could have been one day. More importantly, RuneScape is NOT based in medieval times, if it was, all the towns wouldn't exist, nor would any of the monsters except for a specific few. RuneScape is fantasy. Towns wouldn't exist? What are you talking about? Runescape is a medieval based fantasy, it has what the real world had in terms of government and hierarchy, but with the addition of the many fantasy elements. Seriously people, can you at least get the very basics of history right before writing something? fantasy or not? If you want to write a serious story, or even a book, you will eventually have to start doing a lot of research, because even the simplest misconceptions will kill the realism in any story, and the reader will simply not be able to take it seriously. It's important. The fact that some of you can't even get the basics down such as what Medieval is, and so on, shows that you have a long way to go. The key to any good story is that the reader has to feel like they are in that world, and in the middle of the events. If the writer starts telling you that 2 + 2 = 7, then the reader just says "What The F-? ", and the story becomes a simple piece of text. Lastfm Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Princess Viola Posted September 3, 2008 Author Share Posted September 3, 2008 I haven't read it yet, but there is one thing I noticed in the first sentence that I know will make the story quite unrealistic for me. Runescape is based in the Medieval times, when there were really no "Legal ages", and people often wed as early as the age of 13. 21 back then was like 40 is today. And, people didn't really keep track of who was what age, because they didn't really have a calendar everyone followed. I year could have been one day. Um, yes they did, and everyone knew well what age they were. Years have been kept track of since the ancient times. I haven't read it yet, but there is one thing I noticed in the first sentence that I know will make the story quite unrealistic for me. Runescape is based in the Medieval times, when there were really no "Legal ages", and people often wed as early as the age of 13. 21 back then was like 40 is today. And, people didn't really keep track of who was what age, because they didn't really have a calendar everyone followed. I year could have been one day. More importantly, RuneScape is NOT based in medieval times, if it was, all the towns wouldn't exist, nor would any of the monsters except for a specific few. RuneScape is fantasy. Towns wouldn't exist? What are you talking about? Runescape is a medieval based fantasy, it has what the real world had in terms of government and hierarchy, but with the addition of the many fantasy elements. Seriously people, can you at least get the very basics of history right before writing something? fantasy or not? If you want to write a serious story, or even a book, you will eventually have to start doing a lot of research, because even the simplest misconceptions will kill the realism in any story, and the reader will simply not be able to take it seriously. It's important. The fact that some of you can't even get the basics down such as what Medieval is, and so on, shows that you have a long way to go. The key to any good story is that the reader has to feel like they are in that world, and in the middle of the events. If the writer starts telling you that 2 + 2 = 7, then the reader just says "What The F-? ", and the story becomes a simple piece of text. Umm, by towns I mean if it was based in medival times, Lumbridge, Varrock, Falador, Rimmington, etc. wouldn't exist because they ARE NOT REAL. Ok, and nowhere does it say RuneScape is medieval. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bluejayfan94 Posted September 3, 2008 Share Posted September 3, 2008 Seriously people, can you at least get the very basics of history right before writing something? fantasy or not? If you want to write a serious story, or even a book, you will eventually have to start doing a lot of research, because even the simplest misconceptions will kill the realism in any story, and the reader will simply not be able to take it seriously. It's important. The fact that some of you can't even get the basics down such as what Medieval is, and so on, shows that you have a long way to go. The key to any good story is that the reader has to feel like they are in that world, and in the middle of the events. If the writer starts telling you that 2 + 2 = 7, then the reader just says "What The F-? ", and the story becomes a simple piece of text. Thats why most of mine are related to the modern world right now. But, if I had to, I would research the hell out of it until there was nothing to research lol HomerSPC's Lets Plays : : Minecraft, Portal, Halo and more! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
malo2 Posted September 4, 2008 Share Posted September 4, 2008 Umm, by towns I mean if it was based in medival times, Lumbridge, Varrock, Falador, Rimmington, etc. wouldn't exist because they ARE NOT REAL. Ok, and nowhere does it say RuneScape is medieval.What you're saying makes absolutely no sense. In what way do specific towns determine the time period of the world? Also, nobody needs to tell anyone if runescape is medieval or not, all you need is common sense and you can see it from the architecture, way of life, tools, equipment, and folklore. Lastfm Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bluejayfan94 Posted September 4, 2008 Share Posted September 4, 2008 Umm, by towns I mean if it was based in medival times, Lumbridge, Varrock, Falador, Rimmington, etc. wouldn't exist because they ARE NOT REAL. Ok, and nowhere does it say RuneScape is medieval.What you're saying makes absolutely no sense. In what way do specific towns determine the time period of the world? Also, nobody needs to tell anyone if runescape is medieval or not, all you need is common sense and you can see it from the architecture, way of life, tools, equipment, and folklore. I was going to say that next... but yea, you beat me to it. Just look around, if it dosen't look medievalish to you... You are blind? (Sorry for harshness) HomerSPC's Lets Plays : : Minecraft, Portal, Halo and more! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
llamster Posted September 4, 2008 Share Posted September 4, 2008 I haven't read it yet, but there is one thing I noticed in the first sentence that I know will make the story quite unrealistic for me. Runescape is based in the Medieval times, when there were really no "Legal ages", and people often wed as early as the age of 13. 21 back then was like 40 is today. Legal ages and marriages are cultural aspects of society. As a medieval game, RuneScape has roughly the same technology as they had in the Middle Ages on Earth. As a fantasy game, RuneScape can (and does) have a different culture than they had Middle Ages on Earth. Besides, just because a story is RuneScape-based doesn't mean it has to be set in the same time period as the game, though from what I can tell this story is set roughly in the Middle Ages. Ah, this reminds me about the noob on the Runescape forums who was upset with the quest "Cold War" because apparently his grandparents died in the war. :wall: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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