archimage_a Posted January 28, 2007 Share Posted January 28, 2007 The people. Are. The heroes. Now. The workers. Are. The cash cow. The people. Are. The heroes. How? The master. Calls. the peasants. Now. When we look up. The fields are white. With our bare skins. The morning light. They just walk by. Children fly a kite. A crack of a whip. The skin pulled tight. The mountain ranges. They lie freezing there. We look forward. The wheat that we tear. We will work forever. Go on without a care. Rising one by one. We survive in our pair. We raise our shears. Our charge of rakes. Slashing down them there. The whips we take. The blood flows. Walk though the lakes. They are lost. That here does flesh cake. The bitter freedom. Tomorrow we die. The Americans, their dream. Their lies. We will not survive. Their hands are tied. Our children will remember. The rising tides. We should have stayed. Inside. Together. Now we are here. Bound. Leather. We feel the water. Suffering. Together. It rises to our chests. WeÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ãâænever. _____ No this is not about how Communism is a crual master that kills people who revolt. This is about the people who revolt. Who kill people that are no different than they are. People who are doing a job because its what they were told to do. How people try to do no work. How the American dream is bitter. How freedom is nothing more than a falsity. They die in the end. http://www.uzzisoft..../archimage.jpegWell I knew you wouldn't agree. I know how you hate facing facts. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
sephiroth_king Posted January 28, 2007 Share Posted January 28, 2007 Excellent. That has to be one of the best poems I've read yet n this library. A+++++...And the rest is obvious. =D> Hoping to get a new Signature (with matching avatar) soon. :D In the meantime...Steam username: )I'll rewrite it later (add me if you want) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
hekatetrivia Posted January 29, 2007 Share Posted January 29, 2007 =D> Very well written....looking forward to more of these!!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
warri0r45 Posted January 29, 2007 Share Posted January 29, 2007 Nicely done archimage, Such a unique stucture, Iv'e never seen a poem written that way before but you've really made it work. As for the subject matter, I couldn't agree more at the bitterness and falities of the 'american dream.' Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
archimage_a Posted January 29, 2007 Author Share Posted January 29, 2007 Thanks everyone, either I walked in the anti-america league or I did write an expert poem. Thanks for the comments on structure, I just let it flow, two and three tiered lines just seemed to work. http://www.uzzisoft..../archimage.jpegWell I knew you wouldn't agree. I know how you hate facing facts. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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