archimage_a Posted February 2, 2007 Share Posted February 2, 2007 The shutters. They smash down. The vibrations. Exploded. Through out my heart. The soft squish. Of empathy. Destroyed. In a second. A lance of dispair. Stalking. My soul. Cut down. A moment. It passed. A new wrench. The Bulwarks. Shuddering. My confidence ripped. Tore though. A once mighty wall. Rampaged, ransaked. Ruin. A million shards of glass, wrapped. In ambition. I tear free. Free to dance. In rage, hope, and glory. In love... ____ I stare across. This room. The bodies move. Some long dance. You stand out. Flame. In the wind. Draw me too you. Snake to water. Our eyes meet. A stolen glance. I turn away. You stare on. Turn back. Hypnotic. In a way. Entwine out gaze. Mental embrace. From dream. To life. My heart lingers. You think it over. Hand raised. Shaking. A little. Clasp together. I feel your breath. Quicken. We continue. Passion erupts. Our lips lock. But. The image fades. Dream away. You look away. I stare on... ____ Well basically these are just two poems that I got off the top of my head. The first from thinking about how I cage away my emotions, hide my fun side. The second was just staring across a room at someone, thinking I wish they would look up. Named the 30th of Febuary because they are passing fancy. The first I cage again, the second won't happen...well yet at least. http://www.uzzisoft..../archimage.jpegWell I knew you wouldn't agree. I know how you hate facing facts. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
issy2 Posted February 2, 2007 Share Posted February 2, 2007 *cries* I thought the second one was beautiful, it felt very emotional and deep. Some of the vocobularly is really nice too, 'Flame in the wind' The rhythm seemed a bit weird but I loved it. And I don't like the first one, dunno why. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
archimage_a Posted February 2, 2007 Author Share Posted February 2, 2007 Yes the rhythm....I planned that...obvouisly... http://www.uzzisoft..../archimage.jpegWell I knew you wouldn't agree. I know how you hate facing facts. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Gattree Posted February 2, 2007 Share Posted February 2, 2007 The first one was great......eh..so was the second one :wink: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Xewleer Posted February 3, 2007 Share Posted February 3, 2007 I nteresting, though not one of my favs, nice work on it though I'll show you how terrifying a true Christian can be!It's Xewleer: ZEW le ar, got it memorized?Hermit of the Varrock Library and its proud guard. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
warri0r45 Posted February 3, 2007 Share Posted February 3, 2007 Cool, they're a good read. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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