LolzEditor Posted October 11, 2007 Share Posted October 11, 2007 The end. Was. Near. The symptoms. Were. Clear. The turth. Sincere. Yet I felt. No fear. The final. Good Bye. Was Just. A lie. The. Final. Lie. Before. He. Died. She. Had. To know. Before. His Close. The truth. He must. Bestow. But. his steps. Too slow. He must. Tell Fleur. His vision. A blur. His words. A slur. He must. Tell her. His. Last. Step. On. Her. Doorstep. He slumped. On. The floor. His head. On. The door. His body. At rest. Dakrness. Possesed. Even. At death. His soul. CouldnÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Å¾Ã¢t rest. Pure boredom has lead me to wasting at least 30 minutes a day writing meaningless stories. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
archimage_a Posted October 11, 2007 Share Posted October 11, 2007 Oh don't be such a spoil sport, creative ramberlings got me though GCSEs and everything since and before then. Besides that it was a good poem and the struture very clearly made me read it slowly and decievely...the only bad part was the rhymes....a poem like this doesn't have to rhyme because it has a pattern...and repetion rarely works...and this was not one time it did...Sorry http://www.uzzisoft..../archimage.jpegWell I knew you wouldn't agree. I know how you hate facing facts. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
LolzEditor Posted October 19, 2007 Author Share Posted October 19, 2007 Ok, now i've gotten rid of all the repetition (I think). Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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