Whip. Flog. Thrash.

 

Pain. Twinge. Sting.

 

Scream. Shriek. Squeal.

 

Effort. Labour. Toil.

 

 

 

No time. To mourn.

 

No time. To weep.

 

No time. For sorrow.

 

No time. For rest.

 

 

 

Our skin. The colour.

 

Our pride. Our culture.

 

It marked. Us different.

 

It branded. Us Slaves

 

 

 

We work. We toil

 

We get. No. Respect.

 

We get. No. Pay.

 

We get. Nothing.

 

 

 

My mother. Was taken.

 

Slash. Slice. Gash.

 

Blood. Tears. Horror.

 

She. Was. Deceased.

 

 

 

Why. Must. It happen?

 

Why. Are. We different?

 

Why. Are. We slaves?

 

Why. Must. We pay?

 

_______________________________________

 

 

 

75 Years later.

 

 

 

We. Earned. Respect.

 

We. Are. The same.

 

We. Live. In peace.

 

We. Are. Accepted.

 

 

 

Blissful. Happy. Content.

 

Their thoughts. Have. Changed.

 

I lie. On. My bed.

 

I. Am. Happy.

 

 

 

My grand-children. Come.

 

Worried. Anxious. Concerned.

 

They. Are. White.

 

And I. Am. Black.

 

 

 

Openness. Honesty. Happiness.

 

Acceptance. Recognition. Approval.

 

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Sorry I don't have the time to read the poem. I will though, your poems have inspired me at least once so they can't be that bad. Anyway the important issue is that I really want to know how my system of struture holds up in an actual english mark scheme. So perhaps if you could tell me how that goes?

Whats a "System of structure"?

The use of full stops in seemingly odd places.

 

Anyway my computer crashed with my earlier reply so...

 

Basically both poems read well and I personally likeed them, however the meaning was distorted towards the end, and the overall message is not acceptance, its fear.

 

 

 

Acceptance is when you can say something and people will accept that. If it is something at the expense of another person then that makes it no less of what it is. The other persons responce makes it different, but in an accepting socity people should be able to say what they feel.

 

 

 

Fear is when you can't say what you want because the system refuses to let you. That is not openess or acceptance. Its like saying white is black, it isn't. We are not equal. There are advantages and disadvantages to every aspect of difference. If there were not advantages then they would not exist....That is why there are no brightly coloured hedgehogs, it is naturally a disadvantage.

 

The ability to take someones advtanges, disadvantages and everything else as an individual and the ability to acknowledge differences is acceptance. If acceptance is forced then it is no more right than slavery.