Amestar

First let me say that it has a good idea to it. I like the sword and the solemnness of the knight's request to the boy. But, I must agree with everyone else in saying that it doesn't flow well and there are lot of spelling and grammatical errors. I know that your typing on a forum and people can get lazy- I'm sure I have errors in this message- but a story needs to be correctly written, otherwise the reader gets lost. I would suggest writing your story on Microsoft Word or something and then pasting it in the forum. The more formal atmosphere might help your grammar. Other than grammar, I liked the idea of the story. But there are some parts that you could add to enhance the environment that the reader sees in their mind. There are also parts that I don't think fit with the point of your story. The good-bye part to the girlfriend doesn't fit in with the rest of the story unless you're going to make her a big part later. Also, the name Sam caught me really off guard. One of my favorite parts about fantasy writing are the names! Sam might be a good name in this day and age, but compared with the nights name and the city name and so on, I don't think Sam fit. Anyway, good luck! Amestar