hey there everyone. Im new to this forum. Hi. I wrote this ages ago and only just remembered it. i thought it post it here, see what you guys thought. So enjoy, and please comment.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

The Tale of Kouldris the Redeemed

 

 

 

This is not a story of how things happened,

 

But how they could happen.

 

So keep your blades sharp,

 

and your bows strung.

 

 

 

In the Beginning

 

 

 

The Blue Moon tavern was packed to the rafters with the citizens of Varrok and the adventurers of Runescape. The fire glowed and crackled in its hearth, beer tankards rose merrily and contented laughter rung about the place. Outside it was freezing cold, one of the worst winters in living memory, but inside the building there was warmth and happiness. It was day off for the palace servants, and they wanted to spend their hard earned wages. The people were happy. Except one.

 

In the corner furthest from the fire a tall figure was slouched against the thick wall. He wore a dark green cloak, with its hood concealing his face, a hardened leather jerkin over an olive shirt, green trousers covered leather chaps and tough knee length leather boots. On his arms were dull steel vambraces, shoulder guards and worn gloves. He had a fearsome long sword, nearly two-thirds his length around his waist, along with numerous pouches attached to his belt. There was an unspoken agreement between him and the other drinkers. He sat as far away from them as he could and they sat as far away from him as they could.

 

Although nobody knew, his name was Kouldris and he was in trouble. His life had never been good, but he seemed to have things sorted out. The criminal gang had given him a roof over his head and gave him the chance to prove himself. He was the rising star in their ranks, an expert at stagecoach ambushes and attacking travellers, doing quite well. Although he had pangs of guilt sometimes, he had ignored them. Until that one night where everything had gone wrong. He was now a wanted man by the Varrok City guard, The Blood Wolves, his own gang and about seven other criminal rings. But this was not what was now bothering him. He was well into his pint and his conscience was nagging him.

 

ÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ãâ¹ÃâYou canÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Å¾Ã¢t remember the last time you did a good deed. Not One. You are a criminal. You have brought misery upon yourself and others. You have wasted your life. ÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Å¾Ã¢

 

 

 

 

 

His train of thought was by a gust of freezing air, as a party of men arrived. They were a rough lot; five in total all swaying on their feet. Daggers were barely concealed in boots or at sides and their bodies were covered with scars and tattoos. Behind them, one dragged a small girl, who was sobbing quietly. They slumped towards their stools, one dragging the girl in clad in rags behind. She resisted for a second and the man beat fiercely her around her head.

 

ÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ãâ¦Ã¢â¬ÅMove dam you, slave, move!ÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬ÃâÃ

I really like it. There are a few spelling errors, but it's a fantastic, original story that you can definitely expand on :D

Welcome to the forum, inverted1 8-) Hope you like it in tip.it so far. Your story was good for a beginning! But I don't give reviews to a story or c/c it anymore. I'm waiting for people to ask for some reviews in my review thread. So if you want a nice reviews, just ask for one in my post. Same day, I'll get your review in. \

 

 

 

Well, since your new...Why not check out some awesome stories here? Examples.

 

 

 

The Desiral Project, by archimage_a.

 

Runescape, above and beyond, by Xewleer (Runs review thread with me).

 

Lumbridge, it's long past. By darkforaster.

 

And why not The Dirge of Caduceus, by sephiroth_king (Me :lol: ).

 

 

 

Four excellent stories, if I do say so myself. All of them will give good examples of writing, runescape or not (Mine and archimage_a's aren't, howver the other Xew's and dark's are).

 

 

 

Well happy reading, and good job!

 

 

 

/\/\/\Sephiroth_King/\/\/\

thanks for the reviews :D

 

 

 

im currently writing a sequel, so tell your friends! Erm, where is this review topic? I can't seem to find it or I would post on it...

thanks for the reviews :D

 

 

 

im currently writing a sequel, so tell your friends! Erm, where is this review topic? I can't seem to find it or I would post on it...

 

 

 

It is named within the library "Reviewing the best or worst, Sephy and Xew's review thread!" I think it's a couple of spaces down. But don't post your story, just a request for a review, then I will rate you and post the review there. :D

Reviewed, please see the main post on this subject, and you can read it!