Chase that hat!

 

 

Chapter 1:

 

 

 

TÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Å¾Ã¢was not long ago that the government decided to drop these amazing crackers, but they didnÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Å¾Ã¢t know it would cause a riot. Once people had picked up these crackers they started to pull them with others, they did not know that one of the items inside would be worth millions in a few yearsÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Å¾Ã¢ time. This item was called a party hat they came in different colours with blue and pink being the rarest, they were made in a material which was very valuable in these times. People went crazy after a while to get their hands on these, there was people tricking others; there was people killing others; there was people stealing them and there were people screaming for them.

 

I happened to find one of these crackers in my possession, I didnÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Å¾Ã¢t know it was going to be rare, so in the spirit I happily cracked the cracker with an friend, I got the party hat but at the time the other item was more rare. I wore the hat like it was a crown; little did I know that some people were willing to kill me to get it.

Chapter 2:

 

 

 

I went around the amazing town of Varrock with my new hat, people looked as I passed. I didnÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Å¾Ã¢t notice the man run in front of me when I crashed into him, when I apologized he asked me if I would let him try me blue party hat on. I replied ÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ãâ¦Ã¢â¬Å, you can wear this hat, if you promise to Saradomin and Zamorak that you will not in any way steal or damage this hat!ÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬ÃâÃ

Chapter 3

 

 

 

The Zamorak wizard put his animal-like hands on the hat then a sudden bolt of pure white lighting came down from the heavens and obliterated him. I didnÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Å¾Ã¢t know what to expect next. A blinding light came from up above and the almighty god Saradomin came forth and stripped the hat from right before my eyes. The anger inside me took over that day and I plunged deeper into the wilderness and I took a blow at a inexperienced ranger and before me lay a blue hatÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ãâæ

 

 

 

 

 

Tell me your thoughts.... Review please :ohnoes:

Hmm...

 

Cool idea, but there isn't enough detail. More descriptions about the people, places, weapons ect. could make the story have a lot more depth.

 

 

 

Sentence structure was also off, and some punctuation. "An" instead of "a", just small things.

 

It's a good start, but revising and adding detail will get you much more response for your work.