JordanGM Posted November 2, 2007 Share Posted November 2, 2007 Drowning you are patient at the water waiting for a healing word to ease the burden. maybe an apology in a bottle maybe a flare that says "I'm Sorry" numbness kicks in from hurt and cold your thoughts and feelings are obliterated. maybe a world under the surface maybe your heart beats there, alone. you are patient at the water waiting for someone to take your hand and to lift you up. maybe a stranger you've seen before maybe a friend you've never seen to lead you to help you swim to the top. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
archimage_a Posted November 4, 2007 Share Posted November 4, 2007 Good message but its free verse so there is not alot from the poetical side of things. Its not long so there is no alot I can write from the Story point of view...It good but nothing spectacular. http://www.uzzisoft..../archimage.jpegWell I knew you wouldn't agree. I know how you hate facing facts. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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