Drowning

 

you are patient at the water

 

waiting for a healing word

 

to ease the burden.

 

maybe an apology in a bottle

 

maybe a flare that says "I'm Sorry"

 

numbness kicks in from hurt and cold

 

your thoughts and feelings

 

are obliterated.

 

maybe a world under the surface

 

maybe your heart beats there, alone.

 

you are patient at the water

 

waiting for someone to take your hand

 

and to lift you up.

 

maybe a stranger you've seen before

 

maybe a friend you've never seen

 

to lead you

 

to help you

 

swim to the top.

Good message but its free verse so there is not alot from the poetical side of things. Its not long so there is no alot I can write from the Story point of view...It good but nothing spectacular.