WorldScape: A new Universe

[nzall]

Prolouge

 

 

The silver building was reflecting the moonlight in the darkness. Only one of all lights was on. Inside a man with white hair, partially charred black waiting until the sun ejected its solar particles. It was the year 2410, the ozone layer completley wiped out. There was a man made UV sheild over the globe, the only protection barrier between life and death.

 

The man opened up a hacking tool. His plan: create a bridge between the real and virtual world, a place where enything can happen, a place in which he could take the weapons of the greatest thing in the universe: imagination. Once he had these weapons he would destroy the pesky X Claws, an genetic modification of the human species which had been the result of an accident 400 years ago. Nobody knew what had exactly happened back then, but whatever it was, it involved a LOT of energy. He scanned the values of the Genesis and Jenova satellites energy waves. These were the satellites which protected the Earth. He found the values of the satellites and sped up the energy waves. He then activated a radar dish to move into position.

 

A golden light sped across the sky lighting up the darkness. It hit a large mirror in space and bounced back into the radar dish the scientist set up. It sent a high voltage, just below infinity itself down a wire. This wire came into contact with several conductors and transformers which edited the energy type.

 

The energy wave sped along the wires and hit a large stone arch, stolen from stone henge 10 years ago. A large purple light circle spred between the arch. This was the gate way to a world of possibilitys, where anything could happen

 

"At last!" the man said in triumph, "I have found a way into the virtual world!" Everything had gone to plan until...

 

ZZkkk! A virtual spark flitted through the barrier and hit a lone wire on the floor which lead to:

 

"My old and failed time machine! No!!" The scientist cried. This time machine had been created almost 60 years ago, when Lord Venin ruled the Ven kingdom, which spanned over Europe, Canada, Russia and part of America. It had actually been created by the great scientist Albert Einstein III but no one ever found it for 20 years until the scientist found it.

 

The virtual spark animated the machine, making it virtual; It could do anything! The machine whirred into action and sucked up the portal and stone henge. It was lost in time. It was there one minute and gone then next. The only thing that you could see left of it was a massive hole in the ceiling. Barley noticable.

 

"NOOOOOO! My life's research, gone! NOOOOOOOOO!"

 

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I plan to write a bit more in the future. Please tell me if its good or not.

[Fist_of_ozzy]

Meh, Didn't like it much.

 

 

 

Descriptive, but too.....

 

 

 

Too basic.

[Xewleer]

Spelling is atrocious, and plot is hard to follow, one that's really bugging me is satellites! You misspelled it thrice!

 

 

 

Genesis, even Square-enix spells it like this, Please spell that right, of all things...

 

 

 

One last thing, your descriptions are strange, but surprisingly understandable, that is the story's only virtue.

[nzall]

So I'm guessing rubbish right?

 

 

[Edit] I've edited the misspellings now. (Did I spell that right?)

[Xewleer]

Its not rubbish, just beef it up, write it so that people can follow it a little better. Some people can throw someone straight into the plot, with the story its like running to break the land speed record and hitting a concrete wall.

 

 

 

Not painful cause your dead, of course, but you have to ease it in. Perhaps a bit more description on what the virtual world is, what the time machine is and why in the world is he doing that. Everyone needs a reason for their actions, even if it is only insanity.

[nzall]

KK thanks for the tips.