February 18, 200620 yr This is my research paper that I did for English III. Now that it's all done with I thought I mght let you guys read it :P Please note that this isn't necessarily 100% backed up, as I had to connect a few strings near the end, but it should be 99% correct :) Television and ItÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Å¾Ã¢s Effect on Public Opinion Thesis: Throughout its history, the television has brought many changes to the standard way of life and has been a large factor on public opinion. I. History of the Television II. Effect on Public Opinion A. Public Vulnerability B. The News Media III. Changes A. Legal Changes B. Other Changes Television and ItÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Å¾Ã¢s Effect on Public Opinion In 1925 television was discovered simultaneously in the United States and the United Kingdom. It came from the attempts to let people watch the ÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ãâ¦Ã¢â¬ÅnewÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ãâà I just posted something! ^_^ to the terrorist...er... kirbybeam.
February 18, 200620 yr wow nice, i believe there is no more public opinion BECAUSE of tv! we get told what to think and only what they want us to know.
February 18, 200620 yr Author wow nice, i believe there is no more public opinion BECAUSE of tv! we get told what to think and only what they want us to know. It's still an opinion to have no opinion! (Or it's extreme apathy....) I just posted something! ^_^ to the terrorist...er... kirbybeam.
February 18, 200620 yr Very nicely researched, Landon. Awesome paper. Hope you make a good grade on it.
February 18, 200620 yr To be honest it's a pretty average high school paper (I hope English III is a high school class). Overall, you spent too much time writing about history instead of expanding on some of your ideas. The essay didn't really flow well towards the end (you need to separate different ideas by a new paragraph) and comparing TV sales to political events is like comparing computer sales to operating systems (the newer the operating system, the more computers there are worldwide). You only talked about 2 topics in depth, how politicians used the TV and a rant on corporations making money and promoting bias ideas. You didn't really discuss how peopleÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Å¾Ã¢s opinions are influenced; rather you discussed about things on the TV that influence people. I would give it 6-6.5/10, maybe I'm just tired and the formatting isn't helping your cause, Ill have another look tomorrow.
February 18, 200620 yr I'm not exactly sure what the expectation of the paper is, but the first paragraph is really, really weak. Your thesis should smack the reader in the face in the first paragraph of the paper, but I don't see that at all. You instead, talked about the history of the television right away (which should have come after setting up your paper's organization in the first paragraph). You have a lot of information and its clear you've researched it well, but the lack of focus in the paper stems directly from not setting up a clear focus in the first paragraph.
February 19, 200620 yr I'm not exactly sure what the expectation of the paper is, but the first paragraph is really, really weak. Your thesis should smack the reader in the face in the first paragraph of the paper, but I don't see that at all. You instead, talked about the history of the television right away (which should have come after setting up your paper's organization in the first paragraph). You have a lot of information and its clear you've researched it well, but the lack of focus in the paper stems directly from not setting up a clear focus in the first paragraph. Yep, your thesis should be the last sentence in your opening paragraph. This leaves the reader knowing exactly what you are trying to prove out of the opener.
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