Chapter 2 Unconscious...

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

...what...? he whispered. His eyes turned big, he was like a little boy again. Then it was like, gravity consumed him. He fell, his eyes still open. He landed hard on his head. He was unconscious.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Its been a day and still no sign of waking up. Poor boy he really has no chance without a leader or someone as his mentor or something. I want to be his mentor.

 

 

 

The next morning he woke up. I was worried for him... for a little while. He just opened his eyes, i could barely hear a sound from him. he just lied there dead silent.

 

 

 

"Hey older brother." he whispered turning his head to me. I was silent. "Do you have any money?" This time i took a deep breathe... figures. "great he said...." rolling his eyes. "hmmm...." i replied. Then he started to panicking. "i really need to know what day its is!?" he said raising his chest. ".... Tuesday...." i replied. He stared at me he was in shock. Thank Saradomin!" he said with deep breathe and then he lied back down. I looked him, eye to eye. "I have to meet the black arm gang tomorrow around sundown." Then he closed his eyes, he was a asleep again.

 

 

 

Its wednesday today. The black arm gang meeting started an hour ago. It was already dark. The owner of the blue moon inn let me have lunch with him and his family. so I guess I forget... but secretly I didn't want to bother him. It wasn't too long before the boy came down. "WHAT THE HELL!" he screamed practically waking up the whole sleepy town. "You were suppose to remind me..." he whimpered. I just stared. He then went outside and across the street.

 

 

 

I decided I would finish dinner then go out and check on him. It wasn't to long before I finished dinner. I thanked the family and went after my brother. I wasn't worried gangs in varrock, they aren't all that strong. I was in a gang but that was when i was 13. i was in the Phoenix gang for 2 weeks, I was too young to handle initiation. Thank god my father saved me right at the last second, I was almost dead. The building wasn't far from the blue moon inn. SO I was there right away. I open the door and no one was around. It was so dark I could barely see. the I opened a door it was to the downstairs the basement was bright. I walked slowly down the steps. I was quiet. Soon I was down in the basement. i was then in a hallway. i slowly walked through the hall way. I heard big hollower" wheres our money.!" Then a loud clunk. I ran into the room where a bunch of gangsters circling around. I guess there was a fight. Two people were fist fighting. I pushed and shoved through the crowd. One of the fighters was my little brother. His face was covered in cuts and bruise. And he was losing horribly in the fight. Second after second he'd get punched and every punch looked worse then they other. He was tripped by the crowd. he fell his face slammed against the ground. He noticed I was watching. he cried out!"help me brother... please..." he slipped back into unconsciousness. then the winner of the fight lifted up his fist and roared. i walked in and picked up my brother and put him on to shoulder. Then the fighter yelled out at me challenged me to a fight. i wasn't surprised gangsters here are like animals. I just turned and walked away. then he got up to my face and was yelling to me, to give back my little brother. Apparently my brother joined and owed them money. And if someone join and didn't pay up they were to die by fist. The fighter didn't stop yelling in my face, my hand turned into a ball and i was getting tense. i was getting angry to, without a warning i swung my fist against his temple and he dropped to the floor... dead. then i left the house without a thought in my head, it was blank. I went into the Blue Moon Inn and took him up to his room, I laid him dead and fluffed up his pillow, and I gently placed his head down and waited till he was conscious again.

let me know what ya'll think. I'm working on my third.

Not bad, I find it interesting for sure. Just a couple small grammar issues but that is easily fixed.