Errdoth Posted December 6, 2006 Share Posted December 6, 2006 EDIT; I just recently lost all interest in this story and deleted everything and am starting over, this time modernly with a touch of medievil stuff, look for it later Please rate the prologue to my book-in-the-making. this is a history of one of the charecters in the book and happens in the past, it relates to nothing until page, i believe, 56, where everythign unfolds. I have much more, 67 pages more, though I don't want to bore you to death. Please, any and all suggestions, flames, and rude remaks are appreciated. ÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ãâ¦Ã¢â¬ÅEkrob, a mighty Yakku general, led a procession to the armory. The Yakki were marching to war. Yakki were an evil race; a mistake of mankind controlled by a malevolent king. For the past hundred years they had kept to themselves, though there were battles, there was never a war waged between them and any other beings. Their king himself possessed a power so strange and mysterious; he could bend the Yakki to his bidding. All knew he was not really of their race, but no one had the courage or stupidity to bring up the matter for fear of and unspeakable death. The voice of Ekrob was one that commanded respect, one that commanded fear. ÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ãâ¦Ã¢â¬ÅAku gwenÃÆÃâÃâöb, miu siuki losk, Ready the battle lionsÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ãâà Last.fm Signature Overlays Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Errdoth Posted December 12, 2006 Author Share Posted December 12, 2006 Can someone say something? Last.fm Signature Overlays Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Justin742 Posted December 15, 2006 Share Posted December 15, 2006 I like it so far, pretty intruiging. (Hmm, did I spell that right?) Can't wait until I have time to finish reading it! With a quill or reading spectacles, visit the Varrok Library today.Become one of the first members of the Order of Honor!http://forum.tip.it/viewtopic.php?t=572462http://s8.invisionfree.com/The_Order_of_Honor/ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Errdoth Posted December 15, 2006 Author Share Posted December 15, 2006 Thank you Edit: Added more Last.fm Signature Overlays Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Errdoth Posted December 26, 2006 Author Share Posted December 26, 2006 Changed it, don't want you to die of boredom... Last.fm Signature Overlays Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
archimage_a Posted December 26, 2006 Share Posted December 26, 2006 Well it looks good, not terribily helpful saying there are 64 odd pages, and it wont make sense till page 56. That and the fact many people get bored with half a page, I would suggest posting...the first 5 pages at least...Then see what people say... However I would be considered a supporter because...All authors are good authors...even if they mispell the title and every other word, or the story makes very little sense(Eg mine according to the vast majority, though I think they make sense most of the time). So just see how it goes.... http://www.uzzisoft..../archimage.jpegWell I knew you wouldn't agree. I know how you hate facing facts. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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