Reishen Posted January 7, 2007 Share Posted January 7, 2007 In The Shadow Zone No One Is Safe..... The Shadow Zone Is Your Own Personal Hell.... A hell In Which The Smells Of The Corpses Around You Will Stain Your Mind For Eternity... The Shadow Zone Signifies Damnation, One Brought Upon Yourself... I Am Your Hell, I Am Your Damnation, I Am Your Shadow Zone, And I Wont Spare You! Hope you like it i wrote it in like 2 mins. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
archimage_a Posted January 7, 2007 Share Posted January 7, 2007 It sounded like you did it in two minutes...thought it served its probably pupose...To be scrawled on a wall or passing victims to read. http://www.uzzisoft..../archimage.jpegWell I knew you wouldn't agree. I know how you hate facing facts. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
issy2 Posted January 7, 2007 Share Posted January 7, 2007 Um. I don't like it at all. To be honest it doesn't sound like you put much effort into it... spelling is good, but your grammar, punctuation, and randomly capitalising words in the middle of sentences is terrible. Also the words 'shadow zone' sound a bit too modern for this poem. Like it's some kind of dark corner at Zap Zone or something. Plus it's super short. Could do with more detail and description. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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