Faven

[Ravenwood]

Master of Puppets, Sultan of Wits, and Baron of Laughs; yes Faven the court jester was very skilled indeed. Prancing about the Varrock Castle Faven juggled, sang, and joked entertaining the castleÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Å¾Ã¢s daily visitors and staff. With his curly crimson shoes and floppy jingly hat one couldnÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Å¾Ã¢t help but to laugh at the humorous fool. Although the jesterÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Å¾Ã¢s true passion, his true talent was his amusing magic tricks. Whether making a pesky castle imp levitate or turning chicken bones into bananas, his audience always laughed and cheered. Yes Faven the court jester of Varrock was very skilled indeed.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Nevertheless not all was well in the jesterÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Å¾Ã¢s life. Few truly knew the hardships and humiliation Faven faced every evening. You see this is where the true tale of Faven begins. For the 'great and mighty' King of Varrock enjoyedÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ãâæ. no, loved harassing the fool during evening feasts. Faven would juggle, joke, and sing to the king, performing only at his very best, yet the king only joy was to watch the fool suffer. Ravishing his meal and drinking rivers of ale the king made nasty remarks while throwing rotten cabbage at poor Faven. Night after night hate and rage filled the jester as the ignorant king humiliated and misused Faven's talents. Yes, this was the true life of the poor fool.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Although before long twist and change would come swiftly to this king. With time Faven eventually became tired of the 'magnificent' king and decided something needed to be done. Months passed as the jester crucially planned. All had to be perfect before Faven made any move.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

It was the most celebrated day of them all. The entire realm was cheerful and festive for the king's birthday. Parties held, parades went down the street, and five ceremonies were held before dayÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Å¾Ã¢s end. You could not think of a more celebrated time in Varrock. It was of course the king's orders to make sure his birthday was bigger, better, and more marvelous than any other holiday in the year.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

The day of festivities could not have been complete without a grand feast at afternoon's end. Yes all dukes, counts, lords and barons in the realm attend the eloquent meal in honor of their great king. And what would a feast be without entertainment? Of course Faven was attended the feast entertaining away the king and guests. Although the jester did not perform his normal routine this evening. Instead Faven just pranced about the dining hall in the silly sparkly green costume. This of course did not please the king. As the king threw a rotten cabbage Faven amazingly leaped into the air at great height dodging the vegetable. Angered the sovereign threw more and more cabbage. However time after time Faven leaped out of harms way.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Astonished at the jester's apparent talent all the noblemen began to take notice. But the furious king had had enough. Throwing his last rotten cabbage the king anticipated the unmanly leap and hit Faven squarely in the head. This ripped the foolÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Å¾Ã¢s head right off the jesterÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Å¾Ã¢s body! Not a nobleman said a word. All were to shock to even murmur a word.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Moments begin to pass and the awkward crowd starts to attend back to their meals. But just as all are settling down a faint whistling is heard. All ignore the pleasant melody at first and start quietly talking. Soon the whistling began to grow, and within a few minutes none could ignore it any longer. Everyone glanced about the room trying to find the musical source. Surly enough the king slams both fists down on the table demanding the noise to stop but had no affect. Finally a baron stops a person up in the rafter. It was now apparent the noise was from over head and amongst the rafters the real Faven whistled the happy tone juggling about some runes.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

All in the room became dazzled and started clapping on such a grand performance. But Faven wasn't finished. Collecting all the runes in one hand Faven delivered a massive fire blast directly at the king; killing him on impact. Still whistling the happy soothing tune Faven took out four more runes and vanished before everyone's eyes. Stunned once again the nobles stood awestruck as the palace guards attended to the king. Yes Faven truly was the Master of Puppets, Sultan of Wits, and Baron of Laughs.

[Xewleer]

cool! you rewrote it! and that poe stroy is called hop-frog

[LeeLee]

i thought that was greatt it needs editing in some places but other than that i loved it. 8-) It made me laugh. :D

[issy2]

It's a fun story to read, I definitely enjoyed it! However there's a few bits that you might want to edit, change some words etc.

 

 

 

The beginning was great, maybe add some more commas in that first paragraph to make it easier to read.

 

 

 

Try to use the phrase 'rotten cabbage' a bit less, you've got alot of alternatives, use your imagination :wink:

 

 

 

And maybe try to get across Faven's anger a bit more, it's not so clear (ok it's clear, but, meh, you don't really... feel it)

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

On the whole i think it's great, just needs a bit of editing.