Coolarooni, well you might have seen it before, hope you like it tell me what you think all c/c welcome as my friend would say : .

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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Prologue

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Maria regarded the array of objects before her. Crimson soaked chaise lounges, oozing the sophisticated yet hyper glamour of the 1930ÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Å¾Ã¢s. Hand embroidered calf leather place mats, and a complete set of willow pattern china straight from the ports of Vietnam, lay untouched on fine Spanish oak dining tables. There were priceless crystal chandeliers and hand painted dressers discovered after much groping through the Milan archive of interior manufacture. And among this fine collection of mismatched home treasures lay one of the most puzzling paintings in the history of fine Dutch art. This strange sight of a room bulging with the most wonderful memories and stories that the 20th century and before had to offer, might have been a curious sight to behold had you not known what mistress was governing this private affair.

 

 

 

It is time that I introduced you to the hostess of this gathering of belongings, the landlord of this estate of keepsakes, the leader of this party of possessions. Lady Gwyneth Tailor herself. The buyer to rival all buyers, the collector to challenge all collectors and most importantly the spender to silence all spenders.

 

 

 

You are probably wondering what humble, polite, sensible Maria was doing in the luxurious apartment of the preposterous, in your face, grand Lady Gwyneth Tailor. Well the fact was Lady Gwyneth Tailor was facing a situation of bankruptcy. ÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ãâ¦Ã¢â¬ÅLord in heavenÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬ÃâÃ

Heeeheee, lovely! I particularly like the description of all the items at the beginning, it was alot of fun to read ^^

 

 

 

I'm afraid to say I think it needs quite a bit of paragraphing as it's quite hard to read in some places. Readers (and this has been scientifically proven, apparently) prefer short paragraphs as it is more gripping that a long block of text that seems like a task to read ( not that your story was, but lots of stuff together looks a bit crammed in)

 

 

 

Maybe on the last two sentences put them both together, for instance 'it would leave us with no story to follow, now would it?'

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

But you have such a great grasp of the language and you are so imaginative, the style it is written in seems pretty appropriate and reads slightly old-fashioned. You really know how to use your words don't you? :P Great job though maybe needs a touching of editing. =D> :thumbsup:

Righty [garden tool], will get right on it soon, ( i can't say ASAP because that would be a lie :lol: ). Thankyou sooo much for commenting, whenever i write something i'm always aching to know what people think. GOOD *hint* *hint* or bad.

 

 

 

Thnkyouuuuuuoouoouoouououououuouououuououououuo

Heeeheee, lovely! I particularly like the description of all the items at the beginning, it was alot of fun to read ^^

 

 

 

I'm afraid to say I think it needs quite a bit of paragraphing as it's quite hard to read in some places. Readers (and this has been scientifically proven, apparently) prefer short paragraphs as it is more gripping that a long block of text that seems like a task to read ( not that your story was, but lots of stuff together looks a bit crammed in)

 

 

 

Maybe on the last two sentences put them both together, for instance 'it would leave us with no story to follow, now would it?'

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

But you have such a great grasp of the language and you are so imaginative, the style it is written in seems pretty appropriate and reads slightly old-fashioned. You really know how to use your words don't you? :P Great job though maybe needs a touching of editing. =D> :thumbsup:

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

She (I hope Issy is a she) speaks truth. If some can (like myself) write relatively flowerless, then some can burst forth in the effervescences of the english language. In a couple words... not bad!

Wow, I wish I could write like that. You are very good at this! You are Issy's friend by the looks of things? Jesus Christ, I didn't even understand some of those words :oops: (shroud? vagrant?) I'm so ignorant, forgive me. I was never any good at English in school.

Wow, I wish I could write like that. You are very good at this! You are Issy's friend by the looks of things? Jesus Christ, I didn't even understand some of those words :oops: (shroud? vagrant?) I'm so ignorant, forgive me. I was never any good at English in school.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

yes we are friends ^^ :thumbsup: :thumbsup: irl