Hey I just jotted down what I was thinking and I wondered what you tip.itters thought of it. I wont have any trouble finding the right chords (I play guitar) but getting the right vocal sound is going to be difficult.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

I'm sick of leading this double life

 

 

 

with these double standards

 

 

 

I was born pure only to be

 

 

 

brought down again

 

 

 

A fallen race again.

 

 

 

My race is over

 

 

 

life caught up.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Thats just the first verse so far. Trying to write the chorus atm.

Give us a clue of what chords you might be using? :P

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

The lyrics sound good but it's hard to tell without a sense of sound.

death has now arrived

 

 

 

i see them coming my way

 

 

 

my double lifes have thrived

:-w Intro: Asus2,Dmajor,Dsus4,Dsus2,Dmajor. x2

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Asus2--------------------Eminor

 

 

 

I'm sick of leading this double life

 

 

 

Asus2------Eminor

 

 

 

with these double standards

 

 

 

Asus2------Cadd9

 

 

 

I was born pure only to be

 

 

 

Asus2---------Eminor

 

 

 

brought down again

 

 

 

Eminor-------Cmajor

 

 

 

A fallen race again.

 

 

 

Eminor-----Cmajor

 

 

 

My race is over

 

 

 

Amajor----Emajor

 

 

 

life caught up.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

I'm sure I will change up the structure a little bit after I find a vocal sound I want but it will basically be like this.

If you're going for the sad singer-songwriter emo kind of deal it's good ... if you're into that.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

I don't know how far you're wanting to go exactly as a musician or if you're up for challenging yourself with additional arrangements behind the guitar ... but I'd say (if you've got the necessary resources) try and make it stand out amongst all the other songs that deal with the same subject matter.

If you're going for the sad singer-songwriter emo kind of deal it's good ... if you're into that.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

I don't know how far you're wanting to go exactly as a musician or if you're up for challenging yourself with additional arrangements behind the guitar ... but I'd say (if you've got the necessary resources) try and make it stand out amongst all the other songs that deal with the same subject matter.

Ok, Johnny Cash was emo now?

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Go to bed.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

It is a sad song, but it is talking about making my life straight again. I'm sick of not leading the life I should.. The song is also not finished, thats why I'm here asking advice. I don't want it to stand out, its my first song, I want to learn from it. Also its my feelings I could care less if my feelings stand out, I just want to show some emotion with my music.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

I guess no one on tip.it has ever written a song. But if you have please give me some advice.

 

If you're going for the sad singer-songwriter emo kind of deal it's good ... if you're into that.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

I don't know how far you're wanting to go exactly as a musician or if you're up for challenging yourself with additional arrangements behind the guitar ... but I'd say (if you've got the necessary resources) try and make it stand out amongst all the other songs that deal with the same subject matter.

Ok, Johnny Cash was emo now?

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Go to bed.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

It is a sad song, but it is talking about making my life straight again. I'm sick of not leading the life I should.. The song is also not finished, thats why I'm here asking advice. I don't want it to stand out, its my first song, I want to learn from it. Also its my feelings I could care less if my feelings stand out, I just want to show some emotion with my music.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

I guess no one on tip.it has ever written a song. But if you have please give me some advice.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Okay, I'm up now.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

You could take it either as a compliment or an insult, really. Do your homework and realize where 'emo' music started off. No, it wasn't in the 90's. Johnny Cash was emo. Claude Debussy was emo. The Beatles, Nirvana, The Clash, any political band out there is emo, if we're going for technicalities. Robert Johnson? Yup. Mozart? Music doesn't have to have lyrics to be emotional, which is exactly what 'emo' is: expressing how you feel from the very bottom of your soul with all the emotion you can.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Your chord progressions are good. I was just asking basically if you were going to keep it only to one guitar and vocals. Of course it's difficult to really tell you an opinion on the song having not heard it, but you never know. You could be writing the next Hey Jude.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Of course I should have been slightly more specific in my first reply, but I was tired and didn't feel like elaborating.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Good luck with the song, mate.

thanks for clarifying. should I record a preview so you can hear the strumming pattern and critique that? :)

thanks for clarifying. should I record a preview so you can hear the strumming pattern and critique that? :)

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Sure. :D