a story by me : a ghost story

[whitedwarf99]

ok this sort of a ghost story. the idea was that we had to

 

 

 

A)come up with a ghost story wiht a moral

 

 

 

B)use atleast one live changing experience in the story

 

 

 

C)have at least 1 ghost

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

this is my gcse coursework (read note below)

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

any criticism or comments are greatly apreciated.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

(note i have already handed this in and i cannot get it remarked so i cant get a better mark for it but i would like to know what to do better next time)

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

here goes

 

 

 

My name is John Lakely. And this is my story .

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Most people think a lot of things when they see a police man or woman, sometimes jealousy, sometimes disbelief, and sometimes fear. I didnÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Å¾Ã¢t feel any of these, I felt nothing, I felt empty, more empty than I had for years. They didnÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Å¾Ã¢t tell me my Dad had been found drunk. No instead they told me something worse. My auntie, who had become a second Mum to me after my Mum died, was now also dead. two of the main women in my live had left me. The two that I had known since my own birth. From me, someone had taken my Mum, and then just as if they were finishing the job off, they killed her twin sister, born no more then a minute apart, they indistinguishable, other then the single log of white hair in my aunties otherwise brown hair.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Where to begin I ask myself, when, or how. I donÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Å¾Ã¢t know but I think it would be apt to start at the day before the police officers came. How does one begin a tale of misery? I should start with something like, it was a dank and dreary night but no, it was a cheerful night, I should have received a phone call from my aunt telling me she had got home safely, but I didnÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Å¾Ã¢t maybe she was just late or she had a power cut Dad told me. I didnÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Å¾Ã¢t believe him.

 

 

 

ÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ãâ¦Ã¢â¬ÅMaybe she just had a glass of wine to many at the pub and wanted an early night to clear her head in the morningÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬ÃâÃ

[ganon95]

hm...interesting...i couldnt really follow too well but interesting