Cloaked_Shadow Posted September 24, 2005 Share Posted September 24, 2005 My origin is from hole in the fabric of space and timeÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ãâæa dimension of pain and suffering. Torture is more common than debate, combat more common than speech. From all this needless anger and war, our raceÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Å¾Ã¢s scars were born. They spread over our bodies, generation by generation, until finally we were walking tanks, our hard scars covering the corded muscle and fleshy organs underneath. Our skins turned green with bruises; for mothers fought and trained during pregnancy. Sick or weak infants were killed when born and defiant adolescents were tortured until their minds went black with pain and obedience. My homeland is a place called war. The soldiers eat the flesh of their enemies, believing their souls should add stamina to their already durable bodies. Our faces were just stitched globs of flesh with bloody gashes, and pits for eyes and mouths. Nostrils were nothing but slits on our faces, and our ears were places on short stalks that moved to any source of danger. We are a race bred for war; our infants already hard with muscle when introduced to the world. I am far away from all of that now. So many of my people are. A hole in space-time sucked us into a world of peace and tranquility, with blue lakes, green meadows, and forests filled with life. Then we saw the beings that lived here. They called themselves ÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ãâ¦Ã¢â¬ÅhumansÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ãâà ... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dragoncmd Posted September 25, 2005 Share Posted September 25, 2005 I love it especially the first paragraph. very orginal. MORE!!! Pm me if you need anything proof-read, I may not be very good, but I am always willing to help.A Seal Clubber is me!A Oxygenarin is me!6*9=42 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Cloaked_Shadow Posted September 25, 2005 Author Share Posted September 25, 2005 thanks for the praise. this story is open to praise and/or critique. i made this to improve my writing skills...darn Language Arts. anyway, i shall be back with more later. ... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
archimage_a Posted September 25, 2005 Share Posted September 25, 2005 Very good. A good point was 'For the first time in my life, I felt sorry for something I had killed.' It show humanity http://www.uzzisoft..../archimage.jpegWell I knew you wouldn't agree. I know how you hate facing facts. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Cloaked_Shadow Posted September 25, 2005 Author Share Posted September 25, 2005 More pieces of my world fell, and burned away to nothing in the atmosphere. My companions fell with them, their armor protecting them as it had with me. Sometimes, a poor soul erupted in flames and gore. A single gap in shielding could do that. White-hot slabs of metal crashed into the water, their surfaces steaming and slowly cooling. They sank into the depths. The water soon became covered in the remnants of my world. Men had even manned transports that had been shielded from heat. The heat of friction had actually added to their energy levels; shields converted thermal energy into electrical energy. About two thousand people had survived in that one part of the world. There were probably more men in another placeÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ãâæor perhaps another time. Our people donÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Å¾Ã¢t have names. They have numbers, according to rank and clan. I am A-7/789. In long terms: Clan A, rank 7, number 789. My clan brother, A-7/790, swam past and into a gunship, which floated on the water. He gestured to me. We already had names for each other. I was called Asueralak, or ÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ãâ¦Ã¢â¬Åslayer of the evil onesÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ãâà ... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
archimage_a Posted September 30, 2005 Share Posted September 30, 2005 Hello next issue. http://www.uzzisoft..../archimage.jpegWell I knew you wouldn't agree. I know how you hate facing facts. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dragoncmd Posted October 9, 2005 Share Posted October 9, 2005 intresting I liked the first chapter better though. I find it hard to think of orcs as speaking such perfect english. Pm me if you need anything proof-read, I may not be very good, but I am always willing to help.A Seal Clubber is me!A Oxygenarin is me!6*9=42 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
archimage_a Posted October 9, 2005 Share Posted October 9, 2005 I would expect better from you.... They obviously have discovered a bable fish. http://www.uzzisoft..../archimage.jpegWell I knew you wouldn't agree. I know how you hate facing facts. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dragoncmd Posted October 9, 2005 Share Posted October 9, 2005 I would expect better from you.... They obviously have discovered a bable fish. I am sorry master archmage. I have obviously forgotten my hichiker's traing please forgive me :cry: :) Pm me if you need anything proof-read, I may not be very good, but I am always willing to help.A Seal Clubber is me!A Oxygenarin is me!6*9=42 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
archimage_a Posted October 9, 2005 Share Posted October 9, 2005 well this once but do it again and I will cast great terror AND... *get out hitchhikers guide to the galaxy and mumbles 'Swearing'* Where was... I oh yes. AND say Belgium!! to you until you are sorry you ever graced the planet Betelgeuse VII :) :) :) http://www.uzzisoft..../archimage.jpegWell I knew you wouldn't agree. I know how you hate facing facts. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dragoncmd Posted October 10, 2005 Share Posted October 10, 2005 But master you have forgotten I am a computer so "Belgium" is a compliment. Just please don't count!! Pm me if you need anything proof-read, I may not be very good, but I am always willing to help.A Seal Clubber is me!A Oxygenarin is me!6*9=42 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Cloaked_Shadow Posted October 11, 2005 Author Share Posted October 11, 2005 they speak perfect english... and even though they are called orcs, how do you know they are? The title, "paradox", and their perfect english should forshadow something to come. can you guess? ... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
archimage_a Posted October 11, 2005 Share Posted October 11, 2005 I know they come from the: US of F/A: United States of Freinds(Foreigners)/America Off topic beligum is spelt wrong *throws the book at him*,*Crack*, ' Sorry',*Backs away slowly*... http://www.uzzisoft..../archimage.jpegWell I knew you wouldn't agree. I know how you hate facing facts. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dragoncmd Posted October 12, 2005 Share Posted October 12, 2005 I know they come from the: US of F/A: United States of Freinds(Foreigners)/America Off topic beligum is spelt wrong *throws the book at him*,*Crack*, ' Sorry',*Backs away slowly*... what in the world are you talking about? I know how to spell!!...maybe...posibly...at laest I think I do... Well at least I know how to spell Belgium!! after reading your post that is An thats right back away slowly before I pull out my tae know do. :D Pm me if you need anything proof-read, I may not be very good, but I am always willing to help.A Seal Clubber is me!A Oxygenarin is me!6*9=42 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
archimage_a Posted October 12, 2005 Share Posted October 12, 2005 Actually I copyed that misspell from your post. http://www.uzzisoft..../archimage.jpegWell I knew you wouldn't agree. I know how you hate facing facts. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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