helmker

ItÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Å¾Ã¢s nice to see poetry in the forum from time to time. Although IÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Å¾Ã¢m not much of a poet it read very easily and was nice and short. Good job.

Both parts to the story were good. Cliff hangers seem to be the trend these days in the Varrock Library. I prefer the first part of the story a lot more then the succeeding part. It seems the second piece was exhausting her moments before leaving to Falador. With that said I would very much like to see how this story turnouts. :)

Nice interpretation of the dragon slayer quest. Although this story wasnt an exciting read it set the tone for a sequel

Very nice setting the mood in the begining...and throughout the whole story lol. I could tell you put some thought into the story. Two thumbs up :thumbsup:

I didn't really follow through the whole story. One minute your talking about elves fighting the next a elf is practicing singing? It was confusing at times.

The story is good.

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i guess you could call it a short story. It was good. I liked the imp a lot. To bad it suffered so much.

a little long but was good poem.

Your clicking formula is very interesting and all :roll: but i dont care. Its a peom and if people who read it want to comment on it that would be great. But what i dont want is someone telling me merchants do more work because they click more. lol sorry if i have hurt any1s feelings lol.

dude its just a poem

cool story i thought it was great especially at the ending. I thought that was funny. It was a surprise the narrator was a mouse. I was for sure it was a cat.

From past experience I have learned that story have to be short for alot of people to take the time to read them. So in that theme I made a poem short and meaningful. Hope you enjoy and like always please post any comments. Merchant Merchant I pity thee Why oh why canÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Å¾Ã¢t you see Buying low and selling high You steal money and even lie Your way is mean and even wrong Stop your doing itÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Å¾Ã¢s been to long Leave the bank, go out, go play Experience the land thatÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Å¾Ã¢s all I say ~Helm~

I guess this the end of this thread hope everyone enjoyed the story.

i made a few changes to the poem but i cant seem to shorten one of the lines any more. have any ideas??

ok ill see what i can do

is there any other feedback or is it just that no one cares to read the story lol plz post

ok ill try to shorten the long lines. thanks for the advise

thank you

This is my first post in the Varrock Library so plz give me some feed back if you actually read it lol. plz plz post all comments good or bad!!!!!!! PirateÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Å¾Ã¢s Tale Training against pirates in a hidden cave, I stop to talk to the captain Dave. ÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ãâ¦Ã¢â¬ÅWhy do your men carry around all theses nature runes? Is it because they like to mine in the AL Kharid dunes?ÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬ÃâÃ