Prologue

 

Before Zaros was banished Armadyl and him were fighting. when he left Zaros vowed he would make a human in his image and Armadyl vowed to do the same to beat him once and for all. After Armadyl suposively left Runescape he kept an eye on Runescape until the time was right to create his human.

 

 

 

In the lonely town of Lumbridge two brothers were born. One with the mark of Zaros and the other with the mark of Armadyl. Little did they know that the two brothers and friends would later become enemies.

 

 

 

I will maby write the first chapter later once all the ideas and might change this a bit.

 

please tell me about spelling and grammer mistakes

 

i will take chacter bios for a bit (this will be removed after i stop)

 

Sample

 

Name bob

 

Side Zaros

 

Skills cooks a mean pie

 

Combat type melee

 

Weapon war hammer

 

Interests cooking and reading poetry

 

What they look like fat short man wears his chef hat and bronze armor

 

pm me the bios please or post them here

Chapter One

 

[Arrow had just finished his work and quickly gathered his belongings and ran out of his workshop to get home before the merchants came and flooded the crowded streets of Varrock. He met up with his friend Crimson. ]

 

Hang on let me get my armor from the bank.

 

Hurry Arrow before we get caught in traffic called Crimson.

 

You might as well go too. You never know what will happen these days on the country roads. Arrow withdrew his Rune Armor, his rune scimitar, longbow and his feathered hat.

 

Crimson got his Rune armor too but instead brought out his rune long sword.

 

Why do you always wear that hat instead of a helmet itÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Å¾Ã¢s dangerous said Crimson.

 

I wear it because its cool and you know I can easily spot an arrow before it hits me in the face.

 

(After a few minutes of walking they reached the Gates of Varrock.)

 

Please pay the fee to exit the gates commanded the guard.

 

Fee what fee there was never a fee before screamed a man in dragon armor!

 

Since the dark wizard attack today, that badly damaged the Museum and part of the castle, not to mention the constant gang wars said the guard.

 

What if we stop the gang wars and I can try to repair the castle gates and make some new cannon balls?

 

Fine I guess soÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ãâæ.thatÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Å¾Ã¢s if you even stop the gang wars said the Guard.

 

ARROW what are you doing! I just want to go home and drink some nettle tea screamed Crimson.

 

Well we better get going if we want to go home before nightfall.

 

Sigh why do I bother helping complained Crimson.

 

We might a good reward.

 

What going through the gate for free Wow all that work mumbled Crimson.

 

No we might be heroes, get a parade, dine with the king and we might get gold!

 

Alright if we donÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Å¾Ã¢t get anything good, you owe me one said Crimson.

 

 

 

Chapter 2

 

Alright hereÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Å¾Ã¢s the plan you take the Black Arm gang and I will take the Phoenix Gang.

 

Fine keep it touch with your PM spell said Crimson.

 

 

 

Word on the street is that this is the Phoenix Gang hideout.

 

What's it to ya if there was this so called gang? said Straven.

 

Can I join?

 

Fine if youÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Å¾Ã¢re willing to do me a little favor said Straven.

 

Ok what is it?

 

I need you to guard are weapons store said Straven.

 

Fine.

 

Here is the key try not to lose it said Straven.

 

A ÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ãâæ Arrow come in Arrow over

 

Yeah what is it?

 

I need two phoenix crossbows and some ammo

 

Can do meet me in The Blue Moon Inn

 

 

 

You got the stuff said hooded Crimson

 

Yes here you go keep them hidden

 

 

 

ARROW come in my office immediately barked Straven!

 

Yes Sir?

 

We are missing two crossbows screamed Straven

 

Sir it must have been on my break when Johnny the beard was there.

 

I see youÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Å¾Ã¢re free to go said Straven.

 

Crimson how do we make them stop fighting?

 

I donÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Å¾Ã¢t know said Crimson?

 

How about we lock the leader in the room and make them not be able to come out till they agree to a truce?

 

Good but I was thinking killing them all said Crimson.

 

That works but we will need to set a trap.

 

 

 

Straven sir The Black Arms have been spotted at mines stock piling supplies.

 

Lets move out them said Straven.

 

Crimson are they heading towards the trap?

 

Yes they are said Crimson

 

Good lets do this Arrow

 

 

 

What thereÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Å¾Ã¢s no one hear said Katherine and Straven!

 

Now! cried Crimson and Arrow at the same time.

 

Arrow and Crimson begin to start slaughtering the gang members.

 

Gang member began to flee to regroup.

 

We'll be back cried Stravan and Katherine!

hmmm... some of your facts are off but I don't mind much, promises to be good... character bios, eh?

 

 

 

Name: Zesen

 

Side: Armadyl

 

skills: gilding, shes that girl who makes the trimmed armor, or rather, apprentice to the guy...

 

combat: magic/meelee mix according to situation

 

Weapon: A magical spear, that has good meelee and magic stats, be creative with how it looks

 

interests: smithing and the occasional fight (sober)

 

looks: medium height, muscles thinnish, but strong, carries about with an edge of confidence people think is cocky, but rather, she is cocky because she can. No definite wardrobe, any will do

awsome welcome to the story

The prologue really shouldn't give away the whole story. And because the whole thing is just dialogue, I don't think that the story can really go very far.

what do you suggest i change?

 

any tips?

yes, punctuation.

 

 

 

Commas and quotation marks... throughout the story. especially quotation marks... whenever someone speaks, you use them commas are generally whenever you think proper or demanded.

Make some more text that is non-dialogue. It needs more descriptions and transitions. Yeah, and use quotation marks.