Author's Note: I'm going to put ALL the parts in the first post, so no-one has to sift through the posts to find the next part.

 

 

 

 

 

Prolouge

 

One century ago, The Atomise, a secret group bent on overthrowing The Kingdom of Terebinthic, was defeated, their leader slaughtered. They were never seen againÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ãâæuntil now. ItÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Å¾Ã¢s different this time. This time they have a land of their own. This time, they have The VoidÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ãâæ

 

 

 

Part 1

 

 

 

The two children heard the attack coming. A battle cry followed by the scraping of metal, weapons clashing, and screams of agony. This time the battle was different. This time, the enemy was stronger. This time, their father was fighting.

 

 

 

They saw the fury in their fathers eyes as three enemy soldiers, with the crest of the atomise engraved on their breastplates. He was fighting desperately, casting spells to delay the enemies, to protect his children, his blade slicing the air, slowly backing down. Seeing an opening, he drove his sword into the heart of the middle soldier, piercing his plated armour, but the other two attacked in unison.

 

He tried to focus enough energy to cast a shield spell, but it was too late.

 

Both blades drove into his stomach, jutting out of the other side. Blood spilled, but he did not care. He look at his children, innocent civilians, their eyes watering, watching fearfully, not daring to make a sound. With the last of his strength, the father summoned all his energy into one powerful blast, killing himself, and the enemies around him.

 

 

 

The battlefield was silent. The enemy had retreated. But in ways, the battle was the worst loss the Kingdom of Terebinthic had ever suffered. The land was strewn with blood and dead carcasses, many of which were not the enemiesÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Å¾Ã¢. King Magar walked through the sea of dead bodies, as the loved ones of those deceased searched through the bodies. He recognised two children, a boy and a girl, mourning over a body still streaming with blood.

 

ÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ãâ¦Ã¢â¬ÅDiegoÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬ÃâæVanessa?ÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬ÃâÃ

Only a few grammatical errors, and what you spelled "prolouge" is spelled "prologue." Other than that, it was very interesting and drew me in. The detail is very good. These are on par with the skill of your poetry. As usual, keep writing!

not bad!

 

 

 

however, I do believe atomise should be capitalized if it's a group.

 

 

 

Not bad at all.