Dragon Pickaxe Cult

 

By Cafebcs

 

 

 

In the design of God Wars Dungeon, a monster named King Mith Dragon used to drop a Dragon Pickaxe. Because it was so powerfull Jagex deleted it from the game but forgot to delete the Dragon Pickaxe from rare drop list. The King Mith Dragon was tested by lots of Q&A before implement it on the real servers and finally someone got the drop but died. The Dragon Pickaxe was about to dissapear but Jagex was on hurry for release God Wars Dungeon. On that hurry the Dragon Pickaxe was saved on the surface as temporal drop in the floor. This lucky bug saved the Dragon Pickaxe on the game.

 

 

 

The Dragon Pickaxe was noticied first by the Drunken Dwarf. He thought it was a player wearing Full Dragon. He said "Hello Matey" and he waited there without response. He thought then it was a dead player. He cried a bit and then he said "Sorry Matey" and the Drunken Dwarf bygone.

 

 

 

The Drunken Dwarf went at his friends in Keldagrim. He entered to the Tavern talking about the stuff that happened on the morning. His friends, more drunk than him, didn't listen about he was saying, but instead that they wanted a piece of his Kebab. Nurmof was on middle of them.

 

 

 

Nurmof, with the Drunken Dwarf, went to Dorges-Kann on the night to buy Kebabs but they got ill after they knew with what the Kebabs were made there.

 

 

 

Jagex made his daily backup on the morning and the Dragon Pickaxe didn't get deleted. Nurmof, still ill, was reset to Dwarven Mines. Nurmof said with a sigh "Omg Jagex 7am!, none buys pickaxes on the morning!". Nurmof was really tired and with a headache.

 

 

 

Next to Nurmof, the Drunken Dwarf appeared and he said "Here a beer". Nurmof took the beer and he drunk it very fast ending it with relief.

 

 

 

Nurmof tried to remember about the past day and he said: "What was you telling us yesterday?". Nurmof, after know the details, said "I want to go to see".

 

 

 

Nurmof was about to go on that moment but a large line of players came to repair the pickaxe and telling, like if he was a psychoterapist, all that happened with the pickaxe, that they weren't listening and they were sorry. A low level was there looking to him and he said "What?" and the low level logged off.

 

 

 

Was about midnight and finally none there. "I will ask to Jagex for more salary", replied Nurmof. The Drunken Dwarf was sleeping but Nurmof awakened him saying that they will get a beer after visit the place. They reached the place at the dawn but Nurmof was very exited watching the Dragon Pickaxe next to him. He wanted to handle the pickaxe but the daily backup came and, like an awaken from a dream, Nurmof was reset to the Dwarven Mines.

 

 

 

"Was a dream?" said for himself Nurmof. Then he added: "When I get a break I will go to that place again". And there was the low level again seeing deeply to him.

 

 

 

Second Part?

It is underdeveloped but like most things that are underdeveloped it has alot of potential. I think that rather than advancing the story in new way you should look at what you have and go into more depth.

 

 

 

 

 

Also do not write in italics, just looks odd.

I agree with archmage. I think you should fix the ending. Also fix some of the wording. I hope I don't offend you if your foriegn and your english isn't very good. But I just think you should fix those specific things before writing a part 2.

I fixed some spelling, please read again.

Me agrees with archi.

Listen to Archi. He's god in these here forums. O:)

Mod not God....Serouisly though you don't have to take my advice, it is there if you want it but thats it.