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Improvement suggestions?

I really dislike the January and 2009 text. Other than that it's boring. I realize it's minimalistic, but still.

I appreciate that, but that doesn't exactly help to improve, does it?

Don't make the January 2009 text blend in with the lines. There is no point for the focal to be harder to read.

Something you could try that would still keep the text interesting:

 

1. Remove the blue strips

 

2. Make the white part taller so that January isn't getting so cut off.

 

3. Make "2009" white and move it up so that it looks like it's part of the white strip (like what you have now, but attached to the white instead of the blue). Also, don't cut it off so much.

 

 

 

Even if this is done, I can still see the piece looking rather boring. Minimalist work should still have something of interest to look at.