err....please give reviews.My 1st time at a fanfic.

 

 

 

Chapter 1:New beginnings in a new land.

 

 

 

It was morning.i found myself in a strange place i did not reconise(spelling error).The only memory i had was a man clad in blood red robes saying some sort of spell.I got up from the bed room and went outside.There was a man,claming to be the Runescape guide.I wondered,what was this runescape?I had never come across this land in all my travels before.He told me to walk down and meet another human that would teach me how to fish.And thus,i began my learning experience on how to fish,cook,smith,smelt and mine.I nearly lost my life mining a rck that was going to explode!I felt a surge of proudness in myself when i made my 1st bronze dagger.Off I went to Vannaka,who seems to be the greatest swordsman alive.He gave me a shield and a sword.i wore them and went in the pit.Giant rats were swarming armond me!i had to think fast.Holding my sword,i spun round and round in a circle.The rats closing in were all slashed and blood was spurting out of their wounds.i leapt over them and started taking them down one by one.

 

 

 

After a few minutes,i finally finished taking down that mob.Running out of that pit,Vannaka gave me a bow and some arrows.After i shot a few rats down,i went on.After learning everything there was to learn on the island,i went to the mainland.Who knows what suprises would await me there..

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

I would appreciate every review that u ppl give.Thanks in advance!

its not bad, your very good at describing action and how you feel, though what woudl be wise is to add more to each subject that oyu talk about, becouse you "jump" from one thing to another, try to make it a flowing story, so that the things oyu ahve written sofar flow over into each other, its quite good, i like it

Pretty good. Clean up your grammar and punctuation (Its just too hard to read as it is). I'll reserve jugdement until later.