Living, But Still

[aeternitatis]

Living but still, a peaceful mentality

No danger, no fright; no chance of fatality

Away from the world, a tranquil bliss

No need to awaken, all I need is this

 

I see it in front of me, ever so still

Sitting on a table, a simple pill

Slowly fading in, to anger and haste

I swallow it whole; that tingling taste

 

My body is numb, my conscious is weak

My mind wants to scream, but I cannot speak

Happy or sad, I cannot decide

Lifes troubles I face, but pass with a glide

 

Theres nothing to do, no pain left to feel

No need for a drink, a kiss or a meal

I skip through obstacles, day after day

No more running around, for here I will stay

 

The pain has returned, the pills are all gone

My body cant move, cant let out a yawn

My minds on the loose, but my body stands still

The damage I take for a small mental thrill

 

As I open my eyes, all I see is a blur

The candle by the window has begun to stir

Flames and curtains meet, the walls begin to burn

Thinking to myself, soon it will be my turn

 

My last moments, as I thought

I cannot run, I have not fought

This is my casket, home, my cave

My empty death, my burning grave

 

What could it be? What do I seek?

Reality? It's much too bleak

My mind is fried, I cannot think,

But now it ends, a final blink

 

 

 

Just wrote it, took me about an hour.

Critique?

[Pepsiguy]

what would the beat be like?

[aeternitatis]

what would the beat be like?

 

Uhh, it's not a rap bro.

If you want, you can record yourself trying to rap it and post it. That would make me smile. :lol:

[Pepsiguy]

what would the beat be like?

 

Uhh, it's not a rap bro.

If you want, you can record yourself trying to rap it and post it. That would make me smile. :lol:

ya right, my rap is as good as i dance (not so good)

 

but is it a poem? or is it in some other category of music?

[aeternitatis]

what would the beat be like?

 

Uhh, it's not a rap bro.

If you want, you can record yourself trying to rap it and post it. That would make me smile. :lol:

ya right, my rap is as good as i dance (not so good)

 

but is it a poem? or is it in some other category of music?

 

It's a poem. I might decide to switch it up into lyrics for some songs my friend wrote though. If I do I'll post the edited version here.

[Pepsiguy]

*facepalm* saw the poem part decription part

[aeternitatis]

:lol: It's all good man.