Dannydavie Posted January 14, 2006 Share Posted January 14, 2006 AdamÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Å¾Ã¢s revenge A man named Adam awoke with a startÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ãâæ where was he? It was dark, cold and scary. ÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ãâ¦Ã¢â¬ÅWhat the hell?ÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ãâà Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
sirith_knight Posted January 14, 2006 Share Posted January 14, 2006 That was a pretty neat little story, but why did he come out way over by Falador, Draynor or wherever? He was in the undergroud pass after all, just wondering. I figured he would have come out in Ardougne anyway. I liked the story however, that was just a little bit that confused me. There was another strange bit after he got drunk with the drawf where I kinda got lost, but it was short. If you want me to rate I would have to give it a 8/10. Felt like you kinda sped through the end too, that's another thing I disliked. Just some constructive critisicm. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dragoncmd Posted January 19, 2006 Share Posted January 19, 2006 from what I understood he was imprisoned in underground pass and found a passage to either taverly dungeon or kamaja volcano. You have a very good story just clean up stuff like that, also it would be cool to have Iban attempt to turn him into a souless. If you did that you would have to describe his feeling and attempts to stop himself from attacking adventurers. Pm me if you need anything proof-read, I may not be very good, but I am always willing to help.A Seal Clubber is me!A Oxygenarin is me!6*9=42 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dannydavie Posted January 20, 2006 Author Share Posted January 20, 2006 Out of the gloom a man in black robes appeared he approached the cage and declared that he wanted to speak to Adam.ÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ãâà Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
archimage_a Posted January 21, 2006 Share Posted January 21, 2006 Although it was a bit... bitty, it was a cracking story. I just thought it was rather rushed, I don't know maybe its just most stories I read are done in parts. But it was good none the less. http://www.uzzisoft..../archimage.jpegWell I knew you wouldn't agree. I know how you hate facing facts. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lcarroll07 Posted February 22, 2006 Share Posted February 22, 2006 yeah that was a pretty good story but you did kind of rush through it especially at the end. you ended it really quickly Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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