Many years from now, a terrible event will happen in the world of Gielinor.(Runescape is like a continent. Gielinor is like Earth. Look at the globe in the Wise Old Man's house if you don't believe me.)

 

 

 

Anyways, I must get back to the story. Many years from now Runescape was a much different community. The payer, and the ones who were free to roam, were the same. There was no longer charge to live in glory. It was a Golden Age to the runescapers. They loved their community. But there was one problem. One problem that no one could solve. Somehow, the Zamorakian mages had access to the rune essence, and they were using it to make runes of their own. They found portals that they could put in their pack; making it so they could run thousands of blood runes in an hour. (The blood rune temple had been discovered quite some time ago.) Zamorak's power was gaining, and people noticed.

 

 

 

The wilderness was different. It had always had an evil tint, but now a huge evil aura emitted from its' dark depths. A evil scarlet mist hung in the air. Adventurers noticed that when they breathed the mist, they felt constricted breathing, their respiration was slower, and they longed to go deeper and deeper into the wilderness.

 

 

 

Runescape seemed ready for an evil spurt. But no one, not even the best could have been ready for the final battle of good vs. evil.

 

 

 

We now turn our attention to Karsten. Karsten was not the strongest runescaper. Nor was he a level three necromancer. But he would soon be the turning point in the war. His hair was long, [bleep]ing out at odd directions. He wore mime's clothing. His treasured beret, and an odd yin-yang amulet.

 

 

 

While Karsten was awoken by the sound of the barbarians, a plan was completing. All of the dots were about to be connected, and soon, very soon, fate would unfold. Zamorak would step up and claim the throne. And the world would fall into chaos. If Karsten chose that path.

 

 

 

Karsten shivered. "What time is it?" He spoke. Every word came with a new morning headache. "3 am" came a reply from one of the miners.

 

 

 

"Shiznit. It's early to be mining." Said Karsten.

 

 

 

"Well, I gotta beat the crowd." The miner explained.

 

 

 

Karsten yawned. "It seems like more and more people come to Runescape everyday."

 

 

 

The miner stared. There was an eerie moment of silence before he spoke. "You haven't heard what has been going on with the rest of Gielinor?"

 

 

 

"No," Karsten spoke hastily, "should I have?"

 

 

 

The miner gazed into the distance. His eyes were hazy with the morning dew. "Well, there is a rumor going around that Zamorak is going to rise."

 

 

 

"That's crap," Karsten exclaimed, "the Zamorak mages are always 'Zamorak is rising!, He will kill you!, Can anybody give money to the poor?' I mean, its always totally lies."

 

 

 

"I didn't hear it from the mages."

 

 

 

"W-Where did--- Who did you hear it from?" Stammered Karsten.

 

 

 

"That old fart down by vampire village."

 

 

 

"You mean the Wise Old Man."

 

 

 

"He's still an old fart." Prostested the miner.

 

 

 

Karsten thanked the miner for his information then headed toward Draynor Village. It wasn't much of a village though, it looked more like modern day Varrock then a village. It had a hairdresser, a sword store, a platebody store and its very own makeover mage center.

 

 

 

Runescape was expanding every day and Draynor Village was no exception. But, things do age. Old men age too. So when Karsten finally made it to Draynor Village, he knew he would have to try to communicate with a zombie.

 

 

 

The Wise Old Man looked like a zombie. Walked like one too.

Its a so-so 'End of The World' Introduction. It is not that different from any other story of such notion. If you are planning to make a great story this will need a lot of work.

 

 

 

You need to make it more in the Runescape 'world', not saying such as 'F2P' or 'The Wilderness'. Instead you need to use clever words like. 'The Free World' and 'That Wilderness Outside Of Man's Control'

 

 

 

I suggest you think this over alot, there is already enough 10 line stories that mean nothing, yet they have made it ever more differcult for writers to write stories that will be read.

 

 

 

However, you do have 3 choices you can either:

 

 

 

Define five or so adventures stories as they progress to stop, or prevent the stopping of the spread of evil. They do not have to be on the same side, but they must have believable backrounds, end culminate in lots of different situations.

 

 

 

Define one character that crusades for one of the sides, they must be the best you can possibley do and you will need to create countless one scene characters that will stand up on their own(have believable lives and backrounds)

 

 

 

Write a Lore, this is by far the hardest, because you must create not only countless characters that have belivable stories, you need to create an entire world that has such a rich definition that it is believable that this world could actually exist. Then you need to set time parametres, you must stick inside those unless explaining about how certain events happen. Then you need to create a non-bias account of events, having a clear start and a clear end.

 

 

 

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That just the beginning of the story but I have to go so...

"non-bias" archimage? HAHA

 

(I'm just messing with you)

 

 

 

Archimage is right about terminology though, F2P Should NEVER be used in a serious story, in game abbreviations like this defeat any sense of reality in the story.

 

 

 

Also you might want to change the period at the end to an exlamantion point. Your trying to give a dramatic feel to it but it just doesn't have it though I do hope that you continue.

Well Lore is supposed to be non-bias...it hardly ever is though.

 

 

 

You are also lacking in the use of commas.

Okay. This is a bad story. i agree with the other guy. you need to make it more runescape like. dont have you're characters saying "thats crap" and "oh, you mean the old fart." its TOO modern. And yeah, its too much like the other end of the world stories. Mix it up in the next chapter.

This was a very good story!! An extremely good one! They shouldn't have been too casual about the war coming though. Don't make Karsten perfect. It will ruin the whole story. And don't use Draynor or Barbarian Villlage either. Call them say "Draldon" and "The Black Forest". The word "old fart" doesn't fit in. You either make it a comedy or a scary end of the world kind. Don't mix them though. It was a very good idea though and a very good introduction. PLEASE CONTINUE!

oh and one more thing:

 

Many years from now Runescape was a much different community

 

 

 

TENSES

 

 

 

and are you going to continue this or not.

I sugest in the sequel you cut the swearing out swearing can get you into trouble. Or kicked off the forums. :-#