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What happens when some poor fool dares to step outside the lines? What happens when rules are broken and a man stands up for himself? What happens when that poor soul glimpes a better life for himself? When he sees something beyond all all he's ever known?

 

 

 

It's not impossible. When one man dare to break out of the skin he's been enfolded in all his life, and with knowledge in his blood, dangerous things can happen...

 

 

 

One more day, one more night. The horizon offered a weary trek home and a restless sleep. Whips and shouting, then pain and complete exhaustion.

 

And the whole cycle would start again.

 

 

 

 

 

Black dust crumbles. It crumbles onto the page of life. It is nothing more than the shards of a tale, a great man's tale. But left is only the desacated scraps. It shifts in the air and settles on the fresh creamy page of a book. An open book. The pages rustle in the air, and ripple in the darkness...

 

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Well, personally I think that's quite a good start!

 

 

 

Please DO continue it below! I'm not good for ideas..so here's what you can do.

 

 

 

1. Continue the story in completely your own style, keeping the same beginning.

 

2. Type out a plan of events which happen after this, and which I can continue in my own style. (i.e, supply me with ideas!)

 

3. Comment on the beginning.

 

 

 

(or, even better, all three!)

 

 

 

Good luck

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I don't know why but reading that I kept thinking back to the book 1984. In case you never read it the book was supposedly what the fuure could be in a totalitarian government system (was written in the 1940s..so future then, lol) Everyone is being watched all the time and if they step out of line they vanish, all data of their existence is gone... The main character tried to find a way to get around the gorvernment and be happy but never really had a chance, they knew the whole time. He worked for the government, and they were demanded to forget anthing they say but some of them could not oblidge and they would be killed... seems rather similar to me, meh....

 

 

 

Maybe it could have the same principle with a different story line. Maybe even a RS version. Like a man who lives in Varrock and is tired of the rules there, but no one will help him... I dunno, just throwing it out there. In 1984 the main character kept a journal of what he did so people might be able to find it if he died, maybe this could be the book the man wrote as he attempted to fight back.

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Sounds good! Thanks alot for that, I might have to borrow it from a library:)

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