The great battle! The doom knights vs Kimaru!

[rockitdowner]

"Run!" said a villiger, but it was no use. The doom knights already destroyed Canifis. I had survived the battle, but no one else did. My name's Kimaru. I'm really human, but i was givin to the weremen because I was suposed to be the great zamekian warrior. I left Canifis to go to a slayer master. "So you need equipment." said a new slayer master." I could, but I need some gold for it." I said "My village just got destroyed! I'm poor now!" "I'm sorry, gold only." He replied. I climbed over the fence and ran toVarrock. When I got there, the place was in ruins! The doom knights had already struck. I teleported to Burthrope to talk to the slayer master. "I need armor!" I said. "I need cash,another problem." he said. I got mad,so I went to Falador. I finally got free armor from the white knights! i am so mad! :evil: Now it's time to battle the doom kinights! To be continued...

[issy2]

First things first;

 

 

 

villigers-villagers

 

kinights-knights

 

 

 

(Probably just typing errors, but they need to be edited.)

[dragoncmd]

Intresting premise, but your moving far too fast. How did this guy learn to teleport, if this is in rs, where did he get the runes. Describe what it looks like, were there pillars or light? Purple cubes? Did he shrink? Did he disolve? Details are your best friend, Assume that the reader doesn't know anything except colors, and basic shapes and items.