June 23, 200422 yr Here is a string of words I wrote down, a little to malacious to be called a poem I think :oops: I have had some past struggles with my father, and this type of writing helps me let it out. Strangled Thoughts As i sit here, alone with thought I struggle with him aloud Not as a crippled person, alone and cold but as a rebel before a crowd. I treat him as a person No color of skin I see on him Just his wicked eyes and teeth spread out in his evil grin. He sits there and looks at me, his mouth a blaze of rasp and hate. I sit there and take it all in Like rough water past a non-moving gate. Now its my turn, I say to him And he sits back and laughs I yell and scream my innermost thoughts And i see his evil mouth form into gasp. As i continue on my madness of words I see him start to cringe He knows the source of my innermost thoughts He knows that it looks exactly like him. He is now stripped of all power He loses his wicked smile His eyes of evil begin to dim His heart forgets all its wile. I have the upperhand now, In this battle of hate and rage. He is lost in my whirlwind-words He is locked in an eternal cage. And now i sit here, Panting and in cold sweat, I know hes gone forever, Yet now I take his shape, forever locked in my minds debt. If it isn't in your veins, you'll never know.
June 23, 200422 yr Very nice and portrays very vivid images! :D Keep up the good work! Adventurer's Log || YouTube || Facebook || Tip.it Times Work || Wanna Join the Editorial Panel?Maxed Out 01 October 2012 PDT
June 26, 200422 yr Very good job mate :) I hope you can learn to find peace now that he is gone and find a way to let your anger go. Some people do it through spiritual healing, I myself don't believe in that, but I hope you find a way to become a greater man, minus the evil traits of your father. I find myself portraying the role of my father unintentionally also, it bugs me alot too. I've found if I just worry less of what he has said and realize his words are just words, his laughter and suffering he causes upon you is nothing more than his faulted ideology. Make sure you create your own ideology and let it take its form without your fathers influence. This poem is excellent though, nice straight forward piece that gets the point across about an important life struggle. Keep writing, you got talent!
July 4, 200422 yr Author Quite a battle if you ask me... 10/10. At least this isn't reality yet... Who says it wasnt? :roll: To overcome an adversary, action is needed. Or in more laymans terms, its like a balloon. If you pop it hard enough, it goes away. To me, if your being abused/molested or whatever, that kind of action is justified. You need to stop it somehow, and some people only understand one method. :? If it isn't in your veins, you'll never know.
July 7, 200422 yr 1 word/emticon/thing: :shock: Banned from Runescape on a day I didn't play, for a real world trade I never did. Combat 113 - Total 1796 - Top 500 Cooking
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