Okay I am bored on this slayer assignment. (elves btw) So I will write this.

 

 

 

Chapter 1 Mysteries and Legends

 

 

 

In these lands of such fair folk. Tales have been told of ancient Elves and evil folk from the eastern lands. As you can imagine it is hard for an Easterner to get much information but few elves were willing to

 

co-operate.

 

One such elf by the name Kelyn told me the tale of Baxtorian's grandfather whose name has been lost to history. He was told of an evil elf who had co-operated with Easterners who followed the Lord Zamorak to wipe out many elves. It had all started when he first made his way through the Underground Pass to make peace with the Easterners who had slaughtered many of his kind. However his mind was weak to the callings of Zamorak, he became corrupted. His mission of peace had turned into a war against his own kind. He found the Lord Iban whom he plotted with to destroy all elfkind. Little did he know the minds of Zamorakians are fickle and would bring his own demise. Lord Iban gave him a legion of Zamorakians which he was to disguise as Elves and lead over the Mountain. He accepted. Lord Iban gave him the best Zamorakians, he found although they still needed training to weild the power of elves themselves. After months of training, the Zamorakians were ready. He was known as the best singer in the Elven lands, so good he had powered bows to last forever, with his voice he could also invoke the true power of the crystal making it the most powerful weapon in the lands. Disguising the Zamorakians as Elves he led them over the mountain and.............

 

 

 

 

 

Sorry about that this is all the Elf was willing to say, perhaps I shall find more from another Elf.

 

 

 

 

 

Well thats my first part of a story, Advice please on how to improve it and I will continue it later. Any ideas for the name of the elf?

here's a tip... I'll tell you later.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Incase you didn't get it the tip is don't cut off at cliff hangers!

I didn't really follow through the whole story. One minute your talking about elves fighting the next a elf is practicing singing? It was confusing at times.

I didn't really follow through the whole story. One minute your talking about elves fighting the next a elf is practicing singing? It was confusing at times.

 

 

 

Well uhh yeah never was that good at stories. Would write more but can't think of anything.

Not too bad. It's spelled write not wright btw =p

Not too bad. It's spelled write not wright btw =p

 

 

 

Whoops forgot to change that :XD:

here is what i can tell you....you write better than i do so i really cant tell you any...the story is great but you need chronologicall order and more details.