bacab Posted September 26, 2006 Share Posted September 26, 2006 Haikus generally have something to do with nature. So I tried my hand at it. They're all untitled. ----- I was a flower, But I was wilted by love, A heart's scorn cuts deep What fool sun rises? Rises upon the mourning? What cruel irony His face like strong oak, His arms were massive branches, My love was a tree, Oh my baby bird, Why do you fly away now? You are not ready! ---- I'll try to do more, Most were centered on nature, But meanings ran deep. Oh God I can't stop Counting syllables has now Has become a habit I think I'll post like This for a while before some one tells me to stop We don't rebel to sell it just suits us well, we're the bright young things. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
issy2 Posted September 26, 2006 Share Posted September 26, 2006 No don't stop, I like them all very much. I think the last line of the 3rd haiku doesn't fit...but the others, lovely. =D> Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bacab Posted September 26, 2006 Author Share Posted September 26, 2006 ^.^ Thanks. The last line in the third one was because I was describing my love and how powerful he is etc etc, then I realize that he's a tree. Not actually a tree, but he's like a tree based on how I described him so I was just poking fun at myself. We don't rebel to sell it just suits us well, we're the bright young things. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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