Brinner Posted November 10, 2006 Share Posted November 10, 2006 The Chrono Effect Chapter one: Deric was a young boy he read many books for most of his child hood he even wrote a journal of his life. But then one day his father was murdered no one knew who did it but Deric was going to spend part of his life finding out who did. Then when he was older he started learning how to fight with swords and battle axes. Then he became known from his village as a great fighter. He started fighting in the duel arena to gain gold from staking. He earned much gold from fighting he was famous for his work for fighting. Chapter two: One day Deric was fighing a strong warrior with his great axe. But the man shot him twice in the skull with strong arrows. He had to be carried out to be healed. The arrows pierced through and it was amazing he did'nt die. The medical team brought some herblore healers to help. They did little help then a wizard came to help him he casted magic on him. Days later Deric awoken he was still weak but he was alive. He look out the window and tried to get out of bed but he had a terrible headache. A doctor came in and told him what happened. He learned he couldn't fight because of the accident. Chapter three: He had to stay at his house most of the time not doing much except rest. One day he was bored from standing around doing nothing. He walked into his library and looked at the books. He read the titles of several and found one of his old journals he picked it up peculiarly. He opened it up and looked at it. He started reading... Today I went to the store for mom she wanted me to buy her stuff for a cake it was my dads birthday the store owner was a cranky old man... Suddently he had a sever headache then it seems like there was a earth quake except nothing was shaking then suddently the walls,ceiling and everything in his house started tearing away....everything went black... Chapter four: He was slightly dizzy. He checked out his sourroundings and noticed that he was in varrock by the general store. He did'nt know how he got there. He then looked at the window. There was a young boy staring back at him. The boy reminded him of himself when he was younger. Deric turned his head and then the boy turned his head also. Then he finally realised that he was staring at himself. He looked at his hands.. He was a kid again. He wondered how it happened. He walked into the store curiously. He saw the store owner it was a old man. He knew that he died some time ago so Deric knew that he must have gone to the past. Then he heard his fathers voice. His father walked up to him and told him that hes been looking for you then they went to head to derics home....his old home.. Then they were passing through the varrock square when it striked him. This was exactly when his farther died he remembered it his father died from a stealth archer. Then he glared back up near the roof of a house and there was a archer pointing his arrow towards his father. Deric pushed his dad down on the ground. The arrow went right by derics face and barely missed him. It wissed through and struck the ground. Then he had a headache and everything started shaking and everything went black... Chapter 5: -to be continued- Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
archimage_a Posted November 10, 2006 Share Posted November 10, 2006 Brought spelt wrong... It is an ok story the title is intresting but you are either the shortest chapter writer ever or this is going to be a very brief summery of events. At this rate it would appear to be the latter. Try to be more descriptive. http://www.uzzisoft..../archimage.jpegWell I knew you wouldn't agree. I know how you hate facing facts. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Brinner Posted November 10, 2006 Author Share Posted November 10, 2006 well the later chapters will be bigger added chapter 4 btw... basicly the story is like The Butterfly Effect.. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
archimage_a Posted November 11, 2006 Share Posted November 11, 2006 That film was really good up till the end...anyway it looks like you are doing ok. Not gripping or anything but you got the basics. http://www.uzzisoft..../archimage.jpegWell I knew you wouldn't agree. I know how you hate facing facts. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
termenator10 Posted November 14, 2006 Share Posted November 14, 2006 I sorta like the end. Its a good story, you should work harder to pull it off though!!! the movie i thought was awesome. I think it might be be a pretty good story. Oh one last question why is called the "Chrono Effect" forgive me if i spelt the name wrong. The Butterfly Effect was called that for a reason and i wanna know yours? Everyone Sucks but me!!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Justin742 Posted November 14, 2006 Share Posted November 14, 2006 Yes, more detail. With a quill or reading spectacles, visit the Varrok Library today.Become one of the first members of the Order of Honor!http://forum.tip.it/viewtopic.php?t=572462http://s8.invisionfree.com/The_Order_of_Honor/ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
archimage_a Posted November 14, 2006 Share Posted November 14, 2006 Chrono means time...It is very possible that they picked up on that... Of course it hardly is as gripping as the butterfly effect....ok its about as gripping to somone that doesn't know chaos theory but, Chrono effect sounds pretty lame...Although it is what made me read this... The Seagull effect The Ripple Effect Temprus http://www.uzzisoft..../archimage.jpegWell I knew you wouldn't agree. I know how you hate facing facts. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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