Jerrel the Jester

[Merry]

The following is a story I wrote in like 15 or 20 minutes...just a spawn of an idea...tell me what you think. Its not written that well but what do you expect from a story written in such short of a time period. :P Basically I want to know what you guys think of the general Idea. I can always re write it later...lol. but yeh.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Once upon a time there lived an evil and conniving jester in the kingdom of Deragory who wished to dethrone the current King- King Drephas. He was a greedy jester who coveted all that King Drephas owned.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

So one dark and cloudy night he snuck into the Kings bedroom where he lay with one of his seven wives. Cerebellum was the youngest and most beautiful of his wives, and to Jerrel the Jester, the most coveted. He slid a small metallic knife out from his pouch which he wore at his side, coincidently one of the ones he used to entertain the king by day with...how Ironic? He stealthily made his way towards the king and with one blood thirsty stroke of the wrist he slit the king's throat and slipped away into the darkness. Cerebellum awoke next to the king's dead body and shrieked. "GUARDS! GUARDS! COME QUICK! THE KING IS DEAD!!!" Hurriedly they came stampeding into the bedroom, as Jerrel silently watched from afar.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

The next day the king's household was in mourning, while suspicions arouse of the kings untimely death. The king's wives whispered amongst themselves. "A murderer in the house?" "Who would be next?" "Could it possibly have been Cerebellum?"

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Cerebellums dreams were haunted by visions of shadows lurking around. One night the shadow came closer towards her until it was at her bedside and she stared into the eyes that lustfully stared back at her, she realized then that she wasn't dreaming, she was face to face with Jerrel. She could only guess what he wished to do to her. Frightened she cried out at the top of her lungs. Jerrel slipped away before the guards arrived. The Guards and Cerebellum were not quite sure if they should connect Jerrel with the murder of the king, perhaps Jerrel was just taking this opportunity for lack of king and wasn't connected to the murder...or perhaps he was. They pondered what should be done, and finally they decided to take him in, if anything for the safety of Cerebellum.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Jerrel was outraged when the guards came for him. What did he expect? Jerrel began accusing Cerebellum of lying. He lamented and said she wasn't trustworthy, that she was an evil and conniving woman. She was the murderer, not him; she was just trying to cover up her tracks by lying! The Guards considered what he said and came to the conclusion that Jerrel may be right; it made the most sense after all. Wasn't she the one that lay with him the night of the murder? If it wasn't her why wasn't she murdered that night as well? So the guards took Cerebellum into custody and charged her with the murder of their king, high treason the penalty of which was death. Confused and in tears Cerebellum was executed for a murder she was not a part of. Jerrel having taken apart in the ruin of that which he had coveted most, realized he would never gain from the death of the king and slipped away never to return, he listlessly roamed the country side until his death.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

After Jerrels disappearance everyone realized what they had done and warned their children of Jerrel the Jester. The story was told from generation to generation and to this day, children and people of all ages still fear clowns and have nightmares of themÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ãâæ

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

And you thought it was just a silly little phobia didn't you? :twisted:

[Merry]

Any constructive critisism? Or a simple "Nice story" would even do. :P

[warri0r45]

Nice read, I enjoyed it. The only thing I don't like is the name 'Cerebellum'

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Other than that just a few grammatical tweaks, well done. :thumbsup: