SuziAngel Posted January 8, 2007 Share Posted January 8, 2007 I wrote this a few years ago. The language is simple as the beginning is about the feelings of my five year old self. The structure isn't great, but that's not what it's about. The intention is not to impress, just to convey raw feelings. The story in this poem is true. The Unwanted Gift ÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ãâ¦Ã¢â¬ÅWhat presents did you get this year?ÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ãâà The Poison Fairy Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
issy2 Posted January 9, 2007 Share Posted January 9, 2007 Aw it's really nice! It's quite short, but I think that's good. I know poems don't have to rhyme to be good poems, but I think it adds a bit of 'fairy dust' if you know what I mean! Nice one. =D> Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
archimage_a Posted January 9, 2007 Share Posted January 9, 2007 I think it was perfect the way it is. Although listening to music lessened the effect some what :oops: Anyway I think that it is really a good poem and you can tell when someone put actual feelings into a poem. So even though it wasn't the best poem in poetry's sense of poems it was the best in the emotional sense of poems....if that makes sense. http://www.uzzisoft..../archimage.jpegWell I knew you wouldn't agree. I know how you hate facing facts. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
andufusthebronze Posted January 9, 2007 Share Posted January 9, 2007 Wow, I think it has some really deep meaning to you, and it shows. Well done I think it's really good Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
LeeLee Posted January 9, 2007 Share Posted January 9, 2007 You nearly had me crying. Really heartfelt. Thankyou for posting this it was lovely. : Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SuziAngel Posted January 9, 2007 Author Share Posted January 9, 2007 To be honest, I wasn't really expecting any feedback. But thanks for the lovely comments! :D The Poison Fairy Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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