andufusthebronze Posted January 14, 2007 Share Posted January 14, 2007 I'm trying to turn my face away from the computer, yet my tear filled eyes are glued to the screen, tears splash sending ripples throughout the universe. Saddness fills my heart as the text keeps on coming, knowing I'll never be the same. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Xewleer Posted January 14, 2007 Share Posted January 14, 2007 Dude, you need 3 sentences for a paragraph... indentation etc. And what is the point with all these minuscule stories! graarrr! Sorry about that... anyway, what's the story behind this? Kinda curious! I'll show you how terrifying a true Christian can be!It's Xewleer: ZEW le ar, got it memorized?Hermit of the Varrock Library and its proud guard. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
issy2 Posted January 14, 2007 Share Posted January 14, 2007 I'm trying to turn my face away from the computer, yet my tear filled eyes are glued to the screen, tears splash sending ripples throughout the universe. Saddness fills my heart as the text keeps on coming, knowing I'll never be the same. I really like it! I think it needs a teeny touch of grammatical editing, read it through to yourself a few times and add in commas, take them out, add short words etc, to check it sounds right. I very much like it even on its own - and it's very abstract I'm not sure it needs a story to go with it. =D> Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
warri0r45 Posted January 15, 2007 Share Posted January 15, 2007 I'm trying to turn my face away from the computer, yet my tear filled eyes are glued to the screen, tears splash sending ripples throughout the universe. Saddness fills my heart as the text keeps on coming, knowing I'll never be the same. Nicely done. It's so short, but it shows a strong emotion. Bold is my favourite part. It shows the obvious enormity of the mysterious situation. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
andufusthebronze Posted January 15, 2007 Author Share Posted January 15, 2007 aww thanks guys, and Issy that means a lot coming from you! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
LeeLee Posted January 17, 2007 Share Posted January 17, 2007 very cooooooooooooooool i must have missed all the short story writing lately. :D Offtopic: Do you like my new sig??????????gb :lol: I think that short quality pieces of writng are far better than longwinding boring pieces of writng i'm glad you wrote this!!! :thumbsup: :thumbsup: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
andufusthebronze Posted January 25, 2007 Author Share Posted January 25, 2007 Lol, love the sig lee :wink: thanks for your kind comment. I'll post it on your shorter writing thread :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
LeeLee Posted January 30, 2007 Share Posted January 30, 2007 Thankyou luv your sig as well!!!!!! : Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
andufusthebronze Posted January 30, 2007 Author Share Posted January 30, 2007 thanks Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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