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not bad at all! can u please pm me with the unveiling of each new chapter. Some people like short and sweet, but im enjoying the novel of the damsel saving the man in distress. ****** hey just read chapter 2. less exciting as the last but ok. no offence, but there were parts that were a little hard to understand "Well if you have what it takes to meet me and hopefully say thank you. Kinda hard to get a thank you from someone on an operation table dontcha think? Meet me in exactly 5 days in Varrock Center" just the thought of a lifesaver demanding a thanks instead of her going to check up on him is kinda ridiculous.... and i know your the author, but i advise you not to go into much detail about the fight with the brothers. You want to avoid getting off the topic that keeps your readers interested - the girl stay on topic. if you've ever read lord of the rings you would know what i mean. JRR tolkien was a great writer, but at times he would write 50 pages on something totally irrelevant and readers dont like it when the author gets off the main story line for a smaler time consuming thing. keep up the good work, cant wait for chapter 3

truely kept me entertained, i will not complain, it was a good work. Makes a freeplayer want to cry, and curse the three gods because of either his poor financial conditions, or controling parrents, to be trapped in a small world such as that of the free peoples.... but one day! i will be a member! i swear it! good story all the same