Most would not wear their hearts on their sleeves, in quite such a brash , yet very sensitivemanner.
It doesn't surprise me that you are a Canadian, as I am.
You have the means to be a great writer if you work at it more, a couple of things, well.... I would try not to always go for the 'obvious' choice in the ryhme.
It becomes boring for the reader, when you can always guess the next line. Sometimes better to forgo the occasional rhyme and interrupt the meter, to add mystery and more substance. New words will also take your thought process places it wouldn't have been going otherwise, thus opening more avenues for exploration. If you don't have, get a thesaurus, and a rhyming dictionary.
That is basically it.
Keep at it, poetry is something many have a knack for, but so few will take the time to explore. When I was younger i wrote incessantly, not so much these days, but I am old and boring now.
Poetry for Her
in Derek's Blog
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You are a talented writer.
Most would not wear their hearts on their sleeves, in quite such a brash , yet very sensitivemanner.
It doesn't surprise me that you are a Canadian, as I am.
You have the means to be a great writer if you work at it more, a couple of things, well.... I would try not to always go for the 'obvious' choice in the ryhme.
It becomes boring for the reader, when you can always guess the next line. Sometimes better to forgo the occasional rhyme and interrupt the meter, to add mystery and more substance. New words will also take your thought process places it wouldn't have been going otherwise, thus opening more avenues for exploration. If you don't have, get a thesaurus, and a rhyming dictionary.
That is basically it.
Keep at it, poetry is something many have a knack for, but so few will take the time to explore. When I was younger i wrote incessantly, not so much these days, but I am old and boring now.
Keep up the great work.
Oh btw I live in B.C. in the Okanagan :thumbsup:.