Hi all erifeon here (rntothehills in game) and just to say about the new machinima i am creating called elite noob adventures. Please watch criticise and say if you think iIshould continue to create this machinima:

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=xCXFT-_0dYo

isnt that like tehnoobshow or whatever the 12 year old players watch

Hey,

 

Are you a nerd? if so, that would explain a lot.

Hey,

 

Are you a nerd? if so, that would explain a lot.

erm the good type

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You definitely should NOT make any more of these. That voice was just...terrible.

Why it was bad:

1. seems like u were just making it up as u went along.

2. u just recorded it while u played so we could hear ur clicks and breathing.

3. it was obvious u were voicing the second person due to lack of voice change.

4. voices were horrible attempts at stereotype voices

5. seems like you did this out of boredom and wasn't funny just came off as annoying.

6. it felt like i was watching my little brother play runescape and he was just talking random stuff cuz he was bored.

 

tips to make better:

1. make a script, pre plan what u are going to do for ur show

2. get voice actors or practice better voices

3. give a background story, dont just throw us in the middle of his adventure

4. have some people pre-screen/review it before posting on you-tube, this video is a little embarrassing if you ask me.

 

 

that's all i can think of for now. I'm not an expert and by all means i would never attempt to make a video but this is just my opinion on your video.

You definitely should NOT make any more of these. That voice was just...terrible.

Thanks dude for the criticism

Why it was bad:

1. seems like u were just making it up as u went along.

2. u just recorded it while u played so we could hear ur clicks and breathing.

3. it was obvious u were voicing the second person due to lack of voice change.

4. voices were horrible attempts at stereotype voices

5. seems like you did this out of boredom and wasn't funny just came off as annoying.

6. it felt like i was watching my little brother play runescape and he was just talking random stuff cuz he was bored.

 

tips to make better:

1. make a script, pre plan what u are going to do for ur show

2. get voice actors or practice better voices

3. give a background story, dont just throw us in the middle of his adventure

4. have some people pre-screen/review it before posting on you-tube, this video is a little embarrassing if you ask me.

 

 

that's all i can think of for now. I'm not an expert and by all means i would never attempt to make a video but this is just my opinion on your video.

I will do what you said and try to create better videos in the future!

17 minutes of watching you kill Black Knights with a very silly voice is not funny. At all. I switched it off after about 30 seconds.

 

Try to create a plot, don't just go with it. Pre-record lines, etc. Use different font than the one you're using now, because it makes you look like a direct copy of Tehnoobshow.