This is my first story wrote about rs so could you tell me what you truthfully think.

 

 

 

 

 

A long time ago when the land of runescape was young when the great city of Falador was newly born with its gardens blooming lived a small child named Cassie. Cassie was the child of the Duke of Falador so she had everything she had ever needed. She was the most beautiful child in the city with her long flowing blonde hair and her sparkling blue eyes. She was loved by everyone in the city and as the days went past she grew more beautiful and beautiful.

 

 

 

When she was only 10 her Father a great warrior went to war with the King with the vicous barbarians in barbiarian village who were planning on attacking the city. Cassie watched from the city walls as her father rode to the advancing herd of barbarians and as he looked back his soft brown eyes looked into hers and they locked for a second til he turned his head back to the barbarians and charged into them. As Cassie stood there watching him kill wave after wave of Barbarians swirling his sword this way and that way controlling his shield with precision never being defeated. It was at that moment that Cassie realised what she wanted to become when she grew into a women. She wanted to be able to fight like her Father. She wanted to be able to proudly ride out to battle beside the King and fight to the death. She wanted to feel the honour that he did.

 

 

 

So as the years went by Cassie blossomed into a lovley young women. Each day her mother taught her how to cook and how to sew and how to do everything that she needed to know to lead a succesful life. But then afterwards her father would take her out and teach her to become a soilder. She learnt how to fight and could even sometimes defeat her father. She learnt how to ride her horse Kita. She was equipped with eveything she needed in the world and was still learning fast.

 

 

 

Years later when she was the age of 20 she said kissed her parents goodbye and rode on her way to varrock for her weekly outing. Her horse Kita was one of the fastest around and as she sped through the fields and past the cottages she felt like the luckiest women alive. She flew through the new barbarian village and was not even bothered by the low level barbarians that inhabbited it. She finally arrived at Varock Stable.

 

 

 

She took her backpack from Kita and tied Kita up and left the stable heading towards the bustling city centre. She walked in hearing the traders and adventurers seling there wares and one voice above all caught her ears "Adventurers wanted to join a new clan come to varrock castle in 10 mins and be preapered for a battle." it sounded. Hmm sounds intresting she thought and she headed away from the city centre to the cooking guild. She spent the next 5 mins cooking her chocolate cakes and fish. She left and went to the nearby bank to put her stuff in when she heard two voices talking. "yea its the same as last year i asked. The winner gets all the dragon armour and this wicked sword. Cool eh"

 

 

 

Cassie then thought why not i might aswell no point in going home now. So she put on her rune plate and dragon skirt with her rune scimmy and kite and set off the the castle.

 

 

 

To be continued

Try writing it out on Word first, so no spelling mistakes.

 

 

 

Other than that, not bad.

Its sort of a mish-mash of rs and rl. Full drag isnt really a term you would use in real life, although other than that it was fairly good.

 

 

 

Ps. cassie is the shield seller in faldor, is she related?

Well kinda, its my dogs name and then i saw Cassie in Fally and i thought why not. The name was going to be Elenor but Cassie seemed nicer. Thanks for the posts guys. Part two will be coming soon if i ever have the time to write it.

definatly right it out in word. I suggest scrapping the rs talk and any numerals (write out numbers) other than that keep on going.

SOrry for any spelling or grammer in here but it was done late at night after i had just spent 3 hours revising and i needed to relax but most of you know what revising can do to you. Anyway i hope you enjoy the story and i know it rambles on a bit about the love but dont worry i will have in the next chapter lots of violence and drama (if i ever get round to writing it)

 

 

 

 

 

Chapter two

 

 

 

 

 

As i really dont have the time to write out this story as fully as i would like i am going to not put much detail in the battles.

 

 

 

Cassie joined the crowd in the gardens of Varrock Castle and waited until a yound handsome man graced the stage and the crowd hushed.

 

"Welcome, yet again to the Saradoim Follower trials. Saradoim followers or Sf are the protectors of everything good in runescape and we aim to fight of all evil and banish it from this land. To do this we need as many warriors as possible and each year in every town we hold competitions to find 100 warriors and the winner becomes a leader of Sf for their home town. Everyone will have to battle and the last 10 people standing will go on to fight each other and when the battle is over they shall go join the 90 other finialists. So let the battles begin and i wish you all the best of luck"

 

 

 

Cassie fought many battles through that day and in each one she triumphed. She was one of the 10 left and as she looked round the room they all seemed to be men. Infact, she had not seen one women fight today. Anyway, she was told to rest in the castle that night and in the morning come back to the castle all ready to ride to Falador where the final battles would come.

 

 

 

Cassie woke early in the morning and started to get ready. She put on her glistening armour and brushed her long smooth golden hair. After going to the inn for a breakfast she started getting ready for the journey. She filled up her waterskins and cooked some of her left over sharks and lobsters. She saddled her horse and was waiting at the designated place well before anyone arrived.

 

 

 

Finally, the handsome young man who she had seen yesterday came into the courtyard in his dragon armour. She got into a conversation with him and found out that he was the prince of varrock and heir to the throne. She told him of her birth place and her up bringing in Falador. "you are very beautiful", he said, " Infact you are the most beautiful women i have ever seen. Sorry excuse me that was bad mannered a beautiful young lady as yourself would have a husband and i should'nt be saying that.

 

"no i do not have a boyfriend or a husband. I have never cared for any man that i have come across until now. I know i should not be saying this to you but you are so handsome and i fell in love with you the moment i saw you but i kept my feelings inside for you could not love a women like me. I am not a women who likes to sit around and be the damsel in distress. I have to be there fighting and killing the intruders who dare enter our lands and i have to protect the children of Falador or anywhere eles in this gracious land."

 

 

 

The prince looked at her and stared deep into her sparkling blue eyes. " i can't resist i love you to i saw you in the crowd yesterday in the market and in the courtyard. I hoped beyond hope that you would be able to prove yourself and fight and be able to join Sf. Come now we must preaper ourselves the rest of our party is here and we shall be setting off soon."

 

 

 

So Cassie and the prince had fell in love. (and like i said before i havent got the time to put this chapter into much detail because of my exmas coming up i shall end this chapter shortly.) They rode off into the distance holding hands with the rest of the party riding along side them, but the group did not notice the cloud of smoke rise from the great city of falador and they did not hear the faint screams that where in the air.

 

 

 

TO BE CONTINUED

It's a challenge sometimes writing Runescape based stories.

 

 

 

It may be a bit easier to strip them of all references to the fact that it is a game in real life, and instead write it as you would your favorite fantasy genre story. Describe the character's lives, the weather in Gielinor, the religions and organizations in the world of Gielinor, and so on. It may be helpful to go in game and read some of the various books from the quests and mini-quests. Look at that for a moment, and see if that provides you a basis to work from.

 

 

 

You're on the right track-- see if these suggestions add more to your story.