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Part One

 

 

 

 

 

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It was a fine day, Fredrick went to the holy church of Saradomin and prayed to not be in Zamorack's realm which the people called hell. Father Aareck praised him for being such a devout worshipper. After that was done Fredrick got an idea, a great idea! He decided to clear the land in the Lumbridge swamps of the ugly roots that protruded from the damp ground. He got out his "chopping scimitar" and his dustpan, after seeing how big the roots were he said "I'm gonna need a bigger dustpan." After crafting a 50 foot mithril dustpan he finally started chopping the roots, you may be wondering how he moved that haevy thing. So you see unlike other mortals Fredrick had a special gift, he had telekinesis powers, meaing he could move things with his mind. Fredrick soon cleared the marshy land of the roots, only to be heavily pursuited by angry tree spirits. After apoligizing to the spirits explaining that he had no knowledge that roots were part of a tree, the spirits departed, slightly happier than when they arrived. Saradomin was outraged by what Fredrick had done, so Saradomin started war against Zamorack and made Fredrick general as punishment. Fredrick decided that Zamorack was near immortal being a demi-god and all. So The only way to kill him is to destroy his home which the people called hell. The only problem being is that these days you can just go to Zamorack's land in the Wilderness but in those days it didn't exist yet. The three gods shared territory. Fredrick knew slightly where hell wasbut he needed to go on a perilous quest to get there and it just gets harder every step he takes.

 

 

 

 

 

The races enlisted to help him were as followed

 

 

 

1]Elves

 

 

 

2]Dwarves

 

 

 

3]Humans

 

 

 

4]Unicorns

 

 

 

5]Sheep

 

 

 

6]Dogs

 

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While in camp he spotted an elf so beautiful that it made him envious. He went up to her and asked, "What's your name?" the elf replied,"That is not knowledge which can be given away to a person i just met."

 

 

 

So with that Fredrick knew he was in love.

 

 

 

Fredrick bravely led his army into what the people called "a grave" of Iban's twin brother they belived it was an entrance to hell. They jumped in, a blinding light of a million suns flashed before their eyes and then they found themselves in a cave. "We'd better put on our Zamorackian armor so we don't get killed," he said. The army put on light blue armor with red trimmed and a Zamorack symbol in its middle. They felt as though an evil wave was corrupting their minds and they fought to control it. The wave almost took over but Saradomin shined a light into the dark vortex that is their minds and lighted the way for their minds. They made their way through the dark cave, only to be captured by a Lesser Demon because it claimed they had a "good" aura around them. Zamorack agreed and threw them in a dungeon, the one elf that Fredrick loved was currently being tortured right in front of him by Iban, the son of Zamorack. Blinded with rage, Fredrick weilded his Saradomin Staff, uttered a prayer to Saradomin to protect him as he attempted to vanquish what was standing right in front of him. Fredrick then casted the all powerful Saradomin Strike Wave, it, aided by the power of Saradomin could vanquish Iban with ease, though it drained most of his life force. His troops imitated him and did the same thing, many Saradomin Strike Waves flew through the air Iban who was busy torturing the elf didn't notice. Then a lesser demon guard shouted "Master Iban watch out!!!!" Iban lept out of the way just in time, threw the elf at Fredrick, and casted two powerful spells combined into one which he called Evil Family Wave. Just as things looked like the Saradomin army would die Saradomin used all the power in his Crystal Amulet Of Godliness to teleport his troops back to camp. The elf was still unconcious because of the torturing she endured in hell. She had several deep gashes in her skin where Iban slashed her. The wounds were fatal and she could die of it, though with much thought Fredrick decided to risk his life to save the one he loved. Using all the power in his soul he casted several Heal Waves over her alomost lifeless body. The wounds closed but she still did not awaken, he guessed that it was because the torturing knocked her out cold. He also guessed that this was the last thing he will ever guess. He regretted never having told her about his feelings about her and he also regretted not turning off the sink at his home. All of his life force slipped his mind started to weaken and his body started to loosen. He thought that it was his last moment on Gielinor, a tiny voice in his soul told him "No not yet it isn't time." As he started to die the voice grew louder, he was still dying when it was a loud roar. Then he saw someone who he couldn't quite see who they were but he was sure that it was an elf, a beautiful one.........

 

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End Of Part One

 

 

 

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Hope you enjoyed that please give me ideas of how to improve part two that dosn't involve spelling and grammer. I can take constructive critism but if you have any questions, complaints, or protests please post them below this post.

 

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Part 2

 

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Fredrick, looked up only to see that the camp had been ravaged, ravaged by a being known as The Acoplyse, bringer of pain. Countless bodies littered the ground, blood was everywhere on those grassy plains. He looked around, hoping not to find the elf, thankfully he didn't because she plays a main part in the next part of this story. He saw a note that had the elf's handwriting on it, it read "I am going to the stronghold of security, i must get to the goal before the Acoplyse does, if it manages to get the boots of power then all is lost. Do NOT come looking for me I do not want to endanger my leader, or get him killed while defending myself, only losing you out of sight."

 

 

 

 

 

Even though the note said not to, Fredrick went to the stronghold. He was powerful enough to get through the shortcut portals but when he got to the end of the last level, a shock went through his body, he was knocked unconcious and the elf was taken away by the Acoplyse. The elf whose name is Liz hoped that Fredrick was smart enough to look in The Cradle Of Life to find the boots. The Acoplyse locked Liz up in a dark spooky tower, filled with ghosts and zombies. She had a hairpin so she unlocked the door and started going downstairs. Then she saw the most beautiful armor she had ever seen, she reached out to touch it, the armor came alive!!!!!! Liz skillfully pulled out a crystal bow and magic arrows and she started shooting the armor. The armor was broken up to bits as the first arrow exploded on impact. Then Liz ran downstairs only to be mauled by all sorts of unholy things. She made it out with her life, then she saw The Acoplyse! She started shooting it with arrows but it didn't work. Then she realized that it was afraid of flowers! She tied some flowers to her next arrow and let it fly. It struck the Acoplyse in the heart and it howled in agony "That's what you get for kidnapping me you freakin (bleep)." said Liz triumphantly. Fredrick who was reading over this story scolded Liz for swearing.

 

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I am sorry but we are unable to continue this story because Liz recived some brain damage.

Ok, I think you are getting all your posts in this forum though :-k :-w :notalk:

Ok, I think you are getting all your posts in this forum though :-k :-w :notalk:

 

 

 

Lay off if he wants to post here he can!

 

 

 

Good story keep it up!

Go a bit more in depth.....

 

 

 

Way to shallow.