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lol nice chapters u got there

 

very romantic :3>

 

you a natural at it huh :?:

 

 

 

by da way ur proofreading rocks, thx!

thankyou. I actually really enjoy editing, proofreading, so spread the word! Lol. :lol:

is that a true story?

 

meh hehehehe

 

ok i will spread da word and maybe see ya in runescape 8-)

is that a true story?

 

meh hehehehe

 

ok i will spread da word and maybe see ya in runescape 8-)

 

 

 

Umm some bits are true...not all though. And please switch 'cabbage' for a ruder word beginning with 's'. The censor switched it lol... :thumbsup:

*thinks,"what is a word beginning with an 's',"*

 

*searches the dictonary*

 

nothing found...

 

*searches the internet*

 

ah! found it...how rude.... 8-) :thumbsup:

*thinks,"what is a word beginning with an 's',"*

 

*searches the dictonary*

 

nothing found...

 

*searches the internet*

 

ah! found it...how rude.... 8-) :thumbsup:

 

 

 

 

 

Lol um. Let's switch the subject eh...what was ya favourite bit? Least favourite? Which bits need editing?

um..ok..

 

lets see....

 

your a nutral! lol

 

tries again...hmmm

 

well all i can tell you is that its good but you can make it bigger by putting in some detail...and for a story like that...you have to think of a title..there is no way that story can be untitled....

 

k i will think of something else laterz

 

all in all your story is "showing keen interest in writing" :XD:

good grammer (accept for a little here and there)

 

a good beginning and ending to the chapters

 

you can make the chapters bigger

 

 

 

but the rest is good

Yeah I know lol, chapters 1-3 are too short. But I can't think what to add lol. Any ideas? :-k