Phantasm

[mario_sunny]

Just started his story, sorry if it seems fast-paced, I really couldn't think of a better beginning than this.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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It was a quiet evening on the open seas. Tiny ripples of waves splashed against the boat, echoing the sweet sound they produced. The wind howled every few seconds, bringing the mast to life. Small droplets of rain splattered down to the earth.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

John sat on a small oak chair. He was blonde haired and skinny. He strung his lyre at times, but mostly just observed the vast, open sea in silence.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Jim, on the other hand, stood strait up near the front of the small ship. He was brown haired and plump, almost the opposite of John. But they were friends, best friends.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Instead of celebrating new years on land, they decided to take JimÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Å¾Ã¢s boat out to sea. Drink some asgarnia ale, sleep, and party. They figured they could still have a party with two people and a boat.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

John strung his lyre again, a high C.

 

 

 

ÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ãâ¦Ã¢â¬ÅAny idea when the new yearÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Å¾Ã¢s gonna come?ÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬ÃâÃ

[Deiophobus]

heh, I read this on our clan forums.

 

 

 

We should make you our official scribe :)

 

 

 

Anyway, the story is all right, the ending is sort of non conclusive though.

 

 

 

You really like to write, don't you? Half the stories here are by you.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

oh sorry, forgot the rating

 

 

 

:D

[issy2]

Hmm... this is very interesting. I think you enjoyed writing this and it seems a good read, though some bits could do with a bit more flow.

 

 

 

: (I do rate quite harshly though. I thought it was good)