LeeLee Posted January 2, 2007 Share Posted January 2, 2007 :oops: :oops: I no its a little out of date but then so am I. PLEASE POST COMMENTS!!!!!!!! O:) It is a poem but i couldn't get the layout right so it doesn't look like a poem. A Recipe for Autumn First take the two main ingredients Cherished happiness and successful hard work Grind to a pulp With a pestle and mortar Whilst adding the following ingredients in succession: Half a cup of succulent gleaming horse chestnuts, Two pints of brisk fierce wind (must be tempered before hand), The rustic, blissful, exiting essence of a gorgeous, sumptuous Christmas pudding mixture And the charming laughter of a child casting twenty pence pieces into it, Two teaspoons of brandy (the finest no half measures) And hot blackcurrant (strong for sore throats), Six freshly harvested, ripe, sun kissed crab apples And a selection of handpicked berries (any kind will do) Now have it simmer slowly over the heat of a late September sunny spell (this will bring out the flavour) Whilst this is going on chop the rest of the ingredients: A bag of indulgent sweets, caked in sugar from a frantic Halloween raid, Two kilograms of leaves collected with children from your local park In shades of; Peaceful ochre (makes it satisfying), Restless acid yellow (adds zing) Smouldering orange (makes it surprisingly Moorish) And majestic red (to balance everything else) Continue to chop and sprinkle gently in: A tablespoon of mud from a childÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Å¾Ã¢s re-awakened Wellington boot, The bird song from a love struck robin (must be a male robin and therefore a red breasted robin, the darker the better), The smell of a harmonious farm yard, Each member striving to complete their various duties, The feeling of exhaustion after a long walk ( must be a walk you reluctantly agreed to go on but felt strangely pleased you did afterwards), The sound of chattering teeth And the warmth of anotherÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Å¾Ã¢s smile Now combine with the other mixture and sieve Allowing the juices to mingle like the memories from September, October and November This mixture should now be a soft inviting colour that canÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Å¾Ã¢t quite be categorised with other regular colours Finally place this mixture over a raging Guy Fawkes bonfire heat for a whole night In the morning garnish with light rain and sparklers from you know when Serve with hot buttered toast and cocoa in the evening Nothing left to do but shout dinner time what do you think please post!!!!!!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
issy2 Posted January 2, 2007 Share Posted January 2, 2007 WOW!!!! I think it got better and better as I continued reading. I LOVE the following lines (they're my favourite and I think the most creative and fun) A tablespoon of mud from a childÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Å¾Ã¢s re-awakened Wellington boot, The bird song from a love struck robin The feeling of exhaustion after a long walk ( must be a walk you reluctantly agreed to go on but felt strangely pleased you did afterwards), Allowing the juices to mingle like the memories from September, October and November Finally place this mixture over a raging Guy [bleep] bonfire heat for a whole night In the morning garnish with light rain and sparklers from you know when Serve with hot buttered toast and cocoa in the evening Nothing left to do but shout dinner time =D> =D> It's a bit mixed up and I think a more structured rhythm might work well... but it's so fun to read I found myself ignoring that as I read! It's really great, maybe you should do another for summer and winter and spring or something? =D> =D> Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
LeeLee Posted January 3, 2007 Author Share Posted January 3, 2007 =D> =D> It's a bit mixed up and I think a more structured rhythm might work well... but it's so fun to read I found myself ignoring that as I read! It's really great, maybe you should do another for summer and winter and spring or something? =D> =D> I don't think I'll do another poem a while, but i'm glad you liked it Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Deiophobus Posted January 3, 2007 Share Posted January 3, 2007 I loved it =) I too liked the part about the mud wellington. heh. I think it might be better on some lines if you took out the little bits added after in parentheses. but other then that, it was awesome 10/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
LeeLee Posted January 4, 2007 Author Share Posted January 4, 2007 I think it might be better on some lines if you took out the little bits added after in parentheses. Sorry I'm so ignorant what's parentheses???? Thankyou for the lovely comment it was really nice to see Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SuziAngel Posted January 4, 2007 Share Posted January 4, 2007 Sorry I'm so ignorant what's parentheses???? Parenthesis - the extra parts added to the sentences, the bits in the brackets. (Parenthesis British spelling/Parentheses American spelling or plural of parenthesis) The Poison Fairy Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
LeeLee Posted January 5, 2007 Author Share Posted January 5, 2007 Parenthesis - the extra parts added to the sentences, the bits in the brackets. (Parenthesis British spelling/Parentheses American spelling or plural of parenthesis) Thankyou SuziAngel : . Yeah I get what you mean (deiphobus) I sometimes don't know when to stop when i'm describing things. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
andufusthebronze Posted January 6, 2007 Share Posted January 6, 2007 its really good, and adds zing made me laugh Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
LeeLee Posted January 6, 2007 Author Share Posted January 6, 2007 its really good, and adds zing made me laugh Thankyou!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! everyone one for really great, helpful comments. :D :D :D . I really love getting constructive yet postive feedback. :thumbsup: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
issy2 Posted January 6, 2007 Share Posted January 6, 2007 Hm Lee I suggest you do one for summer, spring and winter. : Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
LeeLee Posted January 6, 2007 Author Share Posted January 6, 2007 Hm Lee I suggest you do one for summer, spring and winter. : Maybe. What does "Hm" mean. I'm gonna go and comment on your thread now!!! :D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
issy2 Posted January 6, 2007 Share Posted January 6, 2007 Hm Lee I suggest you do one for summer, spring and winter. : Maybe. What does "Hm" mean. I'm gonna go and comment on your thread now!!! :D YAY! Hm means... well it's not shorthand or anything, it's literally short for 'hmmm' the sounds you make when you're thinking hard. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
LeeLee Posted January 6, 2007 Author Share Posted January 6, 2007 Hm Lee I suggest you do one for summer, spring and winter. : Maybe. What does "Hm" mean. I'm gonna go and comment on your thread now!!! :D YAY! Hm means... well it's not shorthand or anything, it's literally short for 'hmmm' the sounds you make when you're thinking hard. Thankyou issy!!! I was a little confused. : Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
issy2 Posted January 6, 2007 Share Posted January 6, 2007 Np. (That stands for no problem) c/c stands for compliments/criticism, and 'brb' means be right back. Just a few abbreviations you might want to know! : Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
andufusthebronze Posted January 6, 2007 Share Posted January 6, 2007 hm, lets discuss hm Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SuziAngel Posted January 6, 2007 Share Posted January 6, 2007 hm, lets discuss hm Holy Macaroni? :D The Poison Fairy Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
LeeLee Posted January 6, 2007 Author Share Posted January 6, 2007 hm, lets discuss hm Holy Macaroni? :D Tee Hee Hee : Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
warri0r45 Posted January 15, 2007 Share Posted January 15, 2007 Thats nice. I like how the season comes alive with all of those warm discriptive words. As probably suggested above, work on structure a little, but other than that, I heard, smelt and felt autumn, and liked it :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
LeeLee Posted January 17, 2007 Author Share Posted January 17, 2007 Thats nice. I like how the season comes alive with all of those warm discriptive words. As probably suggested above, work on structure a little, but other than that, I heard, smelt and felt autumn, and liked it :) YaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaY!!!!!!!!! :thumbsup: thanyou for all comments, the structure is not on my list of priorities at the present moment but i will resolve to improve it ASAP Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
LeeLee Posted January 30, 2007 Author Share Posted January 30, 2007 you can expect a spring poem soon!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! any suggestions ??? :D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
issy2 Posted January 30, 2007 Share Posted January 30, 2007 you can expect a spring poem soon!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! any suggestions ??? :D holy macaroni (*cough*suziangel*cough*) i'll think about it how about... just a few phrases don't feel obliged to use them :D the warm soft rain and flooding sunlight mix with ripened blackberries, discarded Wellies and the playful woof of a newborn pup Sprinkle in thunder and lightning for extra bark and bite (lol i love that bit!!! : ) And the pink and white flowers you gave your mum on Mother's Day Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
LeeLee Posted February 1, 2007 Author Share Posted February 1, 2007 the mothers day bit is lovely i will make a point to mention that. Also lambs i think Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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