The Great Archer : Chapter 1 -EDITED-

[dangelo]

This is not a true tale of any sorts. It is for your sole amusment only and my bordem of course :P PLease read and tell me what you think, my first story.

 

 

 

Chapter 1

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

This is the story of the greatest archer to ever walk the world of runescape. He was the son of the greatest warrior to ever walk the world of runescape. He was the son of the greatest lady to ever walk the world of runescape. This is the story of Robert Mudluns, son of the great Knight, Sir Mudluns and the beautiful Ptraci.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Robert was born on a beautiful spring day, in the early years of the world, only the fourth generation after creation. He was born ten years before the war against the chaos dwarfs in the north and the free-men and dwarfs of the south, later known as the war of the five armyÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Å¾Ã¢s. It would be one the greatest battles ever fought with Sir Mudluns leading the free-menÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Å¾Ã¢s force. This tale is about Robert, not his father but I shall leave you with a brief story of the battle.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Sir Mudluns forces went far north into the deepest parts of the wilderness and then chased into the chaos dwarfs ranks while the Southern dwarfs, led by their great leader, Gundlus attacked from the south. This southern attack never came. The dwarfs where attacked by Dark Warriors and a group of bandits on the way up and only a mere twenty escaped to the close settlement of Edgeville.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

The battle turned into a slaughter and news came home in the form of a severed head of one of the free-menÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Å¾Ã¢s general. It was believed that everyone had died in this battle and rumour was spread all over that the combined forces of the bandits, chaos dwarfs and dark warriors would lay siege to all the fair cities of this world, destroying everything they could lay their hands on. They would take the children to be slaves, raping the women and slaying all the men of this land.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Robert cried for days but soon he chose what he would do. When he came of age, he would seek his revenge the people that did this to his father. His mother, Ptraci, would never be the same again. Robert would find her sitting on the floor at night, with her head in her hands, crying for hours on ends. Robert, being only 10 at the time, did not know what to do. He called in doctors, magicians even a fortune teller but yet still she would sit at night crying. She was suffering from a broken heart which no one could cure. She died two years later in the harsh winter of 107 at the young age of thirty-five.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Robert knew what he had to do, he had to go to the chaos dwarfs and find news of what had happened. He knew he would be killed on site if he went alone so he had to muster a great many people to travel with him. But who to chose? He had no friends except a young boy called Sam, who would not be skilled in anything. He had his nose in a book all the time reading on "magic runes" and "cast a spell the quick way." Robert only knew of two ways to fight, with a sword and with a bow. He had heard his father talk about the magicians in the army but he just believed them to be crazy old men. He didn't realise his only friend, Sam, was an apprentice to one of the great wizards of their time.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

At the age of thirteen, Robert was believed to be one of the best archers in the whole of runescape. He traveled the whole world, winning arching tournaments in Falador, Port Sarim, and Varrock. You name it, heÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Å¾Ã¢s won it. He knew he had to seek revenge for what had happened and what better time than now when he was believed to be one of the best archers ever and to have adopted the name of arrow, because he was tall, straight as an arrow and his bowman ship was amazing!

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

PS - What do the gods call the world of Runescape again? Cant seem to find that information anywhere!!!

 

 

 

and please rate :D

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

English spellings, not American :D

[ste_mc_efc]

very good i really want to read more

[Zonorhc]

Some points to make:

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

- You might require a spellchecker.

 

 

 

- You may want to adopt a more active (he travelled to somewhere, and when he arrived, he saw something, and did something) voice, as opposed to the passive (when he went to somewhere and saw something, he did something) voice.

 

 

 

- Cut back on the clicḫ̩̉̉s.

 

 

 

- Try not to move so quickly through time.

 

 

 

- Spell out numbers (three) instead of typing in the digit (3).