Virus

UPDATED: 5/20/07, medium update

Still writing. Ratings/comments/suggestions/spell and grammar check are gladly accepted! Also if you have the time bump the story on the RSOF: 49-50-99-43383006.

Part I: Page 1, page 3

-- Chapter one

-- Chapter two

-- Chapter three

-- Chapter four

-- Chapter five

Part II: Page 3

-- Chapter six

-- Chapter seven

-- Chapter eight

Part I: Origin

Chapter One

Daughin Buetford was an adventurer. He traveled from the Kingdom of Misthalin, where he lived in the quiet side of Varrock in a decent-sized wooden shack. The ÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ãâ¹Ãâquiet sideÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Å¾Ã¢, as many folks had named it, was virtually rid of thieves. Most of the people living in the area were in poverty who really didn't have anything worth stealing. Daughin (pronounced Duaf-hin) was actually among the wealthy in this section; he sold his collections from his adventures to the general store owner, Bob. Bob had always relished his findings and had never turned one down. He offered him quite a bit of money, but Daughin would refuse and only accept half of it. He was a kind man, an honest man; unlike many citizens of Varrock. Apart from adventuring, Daughin enjoyed fishing. Every week or so, he would leave his hut and depart on a long trip to Catherby, a small but crowded town to the west. His friends claimed he found fishing ÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ãâ¹ÃârelaxingÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Å¾Ã¢. They also mentioned it was a tad ironic, as his stories of his adventures always seemed to be dangerous and life threatening. Still, he fished by the sunny beach where he grew an apple tree he watched over. Sometimes he would sit on the soothing sand, read a book, and bite into an apple.

Very few doctors roam the lands of Gleinor, it just isnÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Å¾Ã¢t a popular profession. Most folks would rather be blasting a fire wave at their enemies than treating them. Well, if anyone wanted to be a doctor or a nurse, they would probably find a good job at the Duel Arena.

The Duel Arena is certainly not a place to relax and bite into an apple. Meleers, mages, and rangers from all over the lands come to test their strength in a fight between another. The results are extremely gruesome. The injured are laid on the bloody table, needles and stitches fly everywhere, and in a short moment, the wounds are healed, and the fighter continues on. In some cases though, victims die before they can reach an empty table.

Charles 'O Raley was one of the doctors in the arena. Every day, around three thousand patients were treated. He helped with around two thirds of them. His father was a doctor, and his father was a doctor and so on. 'O Raley was really almost forced into treating the bloody. He had a wife and two children, both he wanted to train to become as professional as him. Being a doctor is hard, stressful, and mind racing; but he enjoyed it. Charles had been working for thirteen years; he was forty-four (quite old for a doctor).

He was one of the best doctors along with ÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ãâ¦Ã¢â¬ÅBloodyÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬ÃâÃ

:shock: << This little guy sort of explains it. You have grabbed me and now I need to read more. Very good. 8/10

To improve you need to read it through and check it all makes sense. :wink:

I HATE lag

:shock: << This little guy sort of explains it. You have grabbed me and now I need to read more. Very good. 8/10

 

 

 

To improve you need to read it through and check it all makes sense. :wink:

nice quad lag :) , you really had me going that five people had replied to my story. Oh well, at least I got a reader. :mrgreen:

Thanks for the comliment, and it's not really suppose to make sense yet, I just started the story(trying to develop the characters).

Good so far. Nice to see a unique angle on RuneScape. Continue the story.

Good so far. Nice to see a unique angle on RuneScape. Continue the story.

Thanks :mrgreen:

Very nice beginning, it's well thought-out, and interesting too. =D>

This sounds like the start of an 'epic novel' lol. :lol:

Many spelling mistakes, however if you ignore them, the story is VERY good... :thumbsup:

Can't wait for more...

Will this mysterious strain of virus appear within the story any time soon..?

Only time will tell... :ohnoes:

I like your writing technique aswell, you've introduced two main characters at once, switching back and forth. :-k

I'll give it 9/10 \ (could be 9.5/10 if you got rid of spelling mistakes... :wall: )

Very nice beginning, it's well thought-out, and interesting too. =D>

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

This sounds like the start of an 'epic novel' lol. :lol:

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Many spelling mistakes, however if you ignore them, the story is VERY good... :thumbsup:

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Can't wait for more...

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Will this mysterious strain of virus appear within the story any time soon..?

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Only time will tell... :ohnoes:

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

I like your writing technique aswell, you've introduced two main characters at once, switching back and forth. :-k

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

I'll give it 9/10 \ (could be 9.5/10 if you got rid of spelling mistakes... :wall: )

Thanks :mrgreen:

As for the spelling mistakes... sorry about those(I'm glad I didn't misspell 'mistake' again :( ). I'll re-read the whole story soon and get rid of em.

Ooooh a rating, thanks again :D

Tumbses Upses sorerrriess mann mmemeee haddaddd twwwoe maaannnniiieee dddwwarrvvvneennn sotuoutsss

Thumbs Up Sorry Man I Had Too Many Dwarven Stouts

Good Job

~England

P.S. You like my drunk impression \

Tumbses Upses sorerrriess mann mmemeee haddaddd twwwoe maaannnniiieee dddwwarrvvvneennn sotuoutsss

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Thumbs Up Sorry Man I Had Too Many Dwarven Stouts

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Good Job

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

~England

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

P.S. You like my drunk impression \

Hehe... too many stouts there? :)

Thanks for the compliment :mrgreen:

Holy cow! I did 5 posts! I thought I did 3.

Yay theres more.

I'm lovin' it. 8-)

This is one of the best few stories I've read. But it was quite confusing as you switched back and forward between characters. I sometimes didn't know what it was pointing to till i re-read it.

Overall, I'd give this story a 9/10 [-0.5 for spelling mistakes and another 0.5 for the main focus switch.]

Very good!!!1111!!!111!!One!!!!!!!!eleven!!!!!

I really like the two story lines, but when are they going to meet?

This is one of the best few stories I've read. But it was quite confusing as you switched back and forward between characters. I sometimes didn't know what it was pointing to till i re-read it.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Overall, I'd give this story a 9/10 [-0.5 for spelling mistakes and another 0.5 for the main focus switch.]

The switching storylines was kinda suppose to show their life in a day of work, but I thought it would be dull if I just put Daughin's in one whole chuck then Charles in a whole chunk. I'm sure it would bore the reader.

Arg... I'm gonna re-read the whole thing soon and get those spelling mistakes. Thanks for reminding me :)

Very good!!!1111!!!111!!One!!!!!!!!eleven!!!!!

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

I really like the two story lines, but when are they going to meet?

Soon my friend, soon...

Thanks for the er... rating :D !!!!!111!1!shiftplusone!!!!eleven!!1!11!!!!!

 

 

 

Thanks for the er... rating :D !!!!!111!1!shiftplusone!!!!eleven!!1!11!!!!!

Indeed :D

Chapter four up \

Looks good!

But people should know something is wrong at about the time of black-red vomit.... :thumbsup:

Looks good!

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

But people should know something is wrong at about the time of black-red vomit.... :thumbsup:

Yes they know something is wrong at the vomit but do they know it's terribly wrong? :-s

Bloody vomit isn't an idicator that something is terribly wrong?

That's the point that someone gets rushed to the hosipital

Wow.

Loved it.

Need more.

Can't make proper sentences.

Keyboard shorting out.

Drool covered.

Gah.

*Bzzt!*

Wow.

 

 

 

Loved it.

 

 

 

Need more.

 

 

 

Can't make proper sentences.

 

 

 

Keyboard shorting out.

 

 

 

Drool covered.

 

 

 

Gah.

 

 

 

*Bzzt!*

Thank you.

Glad you enjoyed it.

Get a new keyboard.

:P .

Bloody vomit isn't an idicator that something is terribly wrong?

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

That's the point that someone gets rushed to the hosipital

So you want me to change that to 'terribly' and the other to 'super terribly'? Something like that? :-s

 

 

 

Bloody vomit isn't an idicator that something is terribly wrong?

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

That's the point that someone gets rushed to the hosipital

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

So you want me to change that to 'terribly' and the other to 'super terribly'? Something like that? :-s

How about Super-Duper-Worse-Than-A-Swarm-of-begging-noobs-wrong?

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Bloody vomit isn't an idicator that something is terribly wrong?

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

That's the point that someone gets rushed to the hosipital

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

So you want me to change that to 'terribly' and the other to 'super terribly'? Something like that? :-s

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

How about Super-Duper-Worse-Than-A-Swarm-of-begging-noobs-wrong?

 

 

 

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you win. :wink:

Change it back! That is just too silly.

Change it back! That is just too silly.

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