Mmk, never save as JPEG or else it will distort your work and it will be un-editable. It will also diminish the quality of the image, especially in pixel-art. Also, high saturation is never a good idea, where the original image was using the original MS paint colors; which are of INSANE saturation (neon colors) which will hurt a viewers eyes and take the focus away. High saturation is only a good idea in moderation when used in the centerpiece of your art. Your new line art is great. My only suggestion would be to align the [bleep]es correctly with the current perspective, but it's only the beginning, so I'll save more crits for later. Lastly...what was the original about? I don't even know what everyone's talking about at this point when they say it was 'my original idea' :?