Xewleer

Whats a ranseur? I know its a type of weapon that kills people when you shove it into them, but beyond that... Great story, what happened to that other sci-fi one, was that a one-shot?

Indeed. I practically cried at the end of it. Not bad on the new chapter, but your grammar definitely still needs work.. AND it nearly turned me emo...

Its not rubbish, just beef it up, write it so that people can follow it a little better. Some people can throw someone straight into the plot, with the story its like running to break the land speed record and hitting a concrete wall. Not painful cause your dead, of course, but you have to ease it in. Perhaps a bit more description on what the virtual world is, what the time machine is and why in the world is he doing that. Everyone needs a reason for their actions, even if it is only insanity.

ha ha ha! Worthington! Ha ha! I didn't really get the Eragon vibes there, good chapter.

still liking Macabre, good chapter, I think I'll add a couple of his words to my sig.

Very true...did not notice until you posted that. Really? I found it very different, but yes, it is a similar style. oooh... 2x post

Spelling is atrocious, and plot is hard to follow, one that's really bugging me is satellites! You misspelled it thrice! Genesis, even Square-enix spells it like this, Please spell that right, of all things... One last thing, your descriptions are strange, but surprisingly understandable, that is the story's only virtue.

-Aegis' world capital- Genesis and his team looked over the city/island, the plan to get in had worked perfectly. Standing on the roof of an abandoned house on the top of a hill, they looked over the city, politicians ripe for the killing ran throughout each of their minds. Genesis pressed a button, the Conclave gave him special permission to change his mask, though they forbid him taking it off. It morphed into the face of a rather bookish, but normal looking human. The rest of the team applied disguises. "Tehtys, we're in, please withdraw." He spoke softly into a special one-way radio. The sounds of a naval battle, off in the distance, became silent. When he was sure no communication would be needed until the pickup time, he destroyed it and left the pieces on the roof, among the debris. "Lets move out, I'll find us a suitable low-class hotel, the rest gather your needed information. Lets move out, and remember, we don't need to be suspiciously fake, just act yourself, just don't be mean to the lesser species." They all nodded and went in separate directions. Genesis took a long look into the city. Allowing himself to dwell on the past to reinstate his belief that his plan would work. (Flashback) Genesis sat at his desk in the library, Athena next to him. Athena was one of the oldest of the Conclave, next to Tethys only, and was the closest thing to Genesis' mother. She had been the leader of the project that had created him after all. She was plain looking for what she belonged to, but she had an amazing amount of circuitry inside herself, allowing herself an entire train-system of trains of thoughts, making her a near-perfect strategist. She even counted in acts of God in her calculations, providing for every possibility, except for disloyalty, but that wouldn't be an issue in this mission. Alexia had greeted her with a lot of happiness, even though Alexia had been stolen from her parents at a very young age for slavery, Athena had bought her and treated her well, raising her especially for the task she was in now. She then entered into Genesis' library, and immediately got to work. And she left. And here he was. He knew Alexia was taking those self defense and martial arts classes he told her to take. Now to the task at hand. Everything was going as predicted. -The bug-free beds inn- The landlady was large and commanding, but very, very nice to paying customers, and when she heard that twenty people needed separate rooms, and yes, they would pay all the money needed up-front, she produced the widest smile, and they paid extra to keep quiet! The woman nearly fainted at the sight of all the money at once. The task force met in a dark bar. The under-dressed waitress passed them all beers and they "enjoyed" the show, then went home, looking for all the world like a group of guys enjoying time away from their wives. Everything they said, even to the waitress, was a code specially made for situations. "What would you boys like to drink?" "HEY HEY HEY!!! She's a pretty one, ain't she boys? Ha ha! We'll all have Daniel Jacks please! 'whistles!'" (I got us good rooms, what did you succeed? I want good news. Begin.) Said Genesis, much out of character. "Yeha! That sounds great, hey guys, here about the scandal..." (Yes, and here's the information...) And so on and so on. Idle chatter to every other ear. They left, despising the humans that existed in the bar. Even Genesis, seriously minded though he was, almost felt like starting 'accidental' fire hazards and such in the building. The next day, they began to take up positions around the city. The world leaders were going to meet in one hour. They had to be ready! -Conclave hq- "Well, the naval attack was as you said, now, what else was so important that you had to talk to me." "Genesis, the Fifth, is in your city as of the ending of the naval engagement. He has, by this time, taken up positions to kill every leader. Uniting the entire Aegis world government under you." "And your own position?" "That person I told you about suspects, but he can't prove anything." "hmmm... Try to allay his suspicion. I won't kill Genesis, but, I will do everything in my ability to get his DNA. I have nothing else to say." "Neither do I, I suppose, signing out."

Sounds interesting. Won't judge until I read more though.

Impressive, all that for a b100 p4r7y h47! Heh, those people are relatively weak of mind.

I'm liking Macabre already... Reminds me of someone... its in the back of my mind... Great chapter!

I will, thank you!

if you would like to believe that, then yes, rather, it is my own confusion on your psychological patterns, religious (of self or otherwise) beliefs and your own contradictory (in my mind) words. I simply don't understand you.

Proved right again...

I had made this topic in a thread series that would be a most interesting one to debate, but I have realized that I cannot have any effect here Lock please

Lock please.

Lock please

Alright, everyone has a certain niche where they belong correct? People are happiest there. Personally I am happy in places that get small, but regular visitation, where people there are friendly, and the coffee is good. Leaving Off-topic area. I believe that those atheists who support the minority, will not support the Shrinking True Christian minority, cannot be accepting at all. At least I listen with a calm head and reply with a calm heart. I listen and give my own opinion. I'm going back to the Varrock library, where I truly believe I belong in this forum. I am also finding all recent topics I've created and deleting what I put there. I just can't figure what the atheists are saying. To MY mind, I feel they are contradicting themselves. Maybe, when I figure things out, I'll be back, but, not until then. So long!

Decided to rescind post.

That and Christ... Anyway, The girl I told I liked once laughed at me... in front of the whole class -2 Anyway, I got over it, and discovered an important life lesson, being friends with girls, rather than girl friends, feels a lot better than actually having a girl friend,

... junk post, no longer necessary.

Aww, what kind of poetry do you like. I'll find one to your liking. I like the simple Romantic, Epics and dramatic monologue set in poetry. What were the six new poems? (You've probably updated between me reading and posting this more than likely...)

When you get a LIVE telemarketer... heres what I do 1. Pretend I called the Telemarketer asking for a pizza 2. Tell him that my sister is due to inherit 1 million dollars, but must be married to do so, and he definitely could be the one. 3. Pretend to be the boss of his company. I don't prank call cept once, and I got a guy fired at his job for it.

Not bad, I do like a good Sci-fi. Nice to see you posting, in case you thought I forgot you.

good to hear, play Battle.net dota, tis fun, very fun, just don't feed.