yeah it really needs to be redone. its all happening too fast and i dont rekcon its really rune scape. Rune, is an ancient item, as you know, rune stones, and scape... (dont look at me? lol) but the point is that runescape is based as a medievil community and i doubt that even if runescape is still populated this far in the future, it would keep its reputation for an amazing medievil world. And yes, things are too fast paced. slow things down a bit and think over what your going to do. The quote, 'a quick game's a good game' doesnt apply when writing stories, but dont overdo it with boring lectures every 2nd paragraph. Overall it seems like a good plot to do for a story.